自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and organize your response into a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Avoid repeated fillers such as “uh,” and correct the grammar in phrases like “ride bike” and “training wheels.” Use the past tense consistently because you are talking about your childhood. The final sentence is unclear, so replace it with a specific detail about how you used or felt about your bike.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I usually rode it around my neighborhood, although I needed training wheels at first because I couldn’t balance on my own. I gradually learned to ride without them, and I really enjoyed cycling with my friends.

建議: Give a clear overall answer first, such as “Bikes are mainly popular among children.” Then explain the difference between children and adults using a linking word such as “however” or “although.” Avoid repetition, and use correct subject–verb agreement: “children who don’t have motorcycles yet,” not “kids who doesn’t have a motorcycle.” Add a specific reason why adults may cycle less, such as traffic, distance, or convenience.

範例: Bikes are quite popular among children in my country, but they are less common among adults. Many children ride them around their neighborhoods because they are fun and inexpensive. However, most adults prefer motorcycles or cars because they need to travel longer distances and deal with busy roads.

× I used to ride bike to my next lane or nearest places.

✓ I used to ride a bike to the next lane or nearby places.

The singular countable noun bike needs the indefinite article a. Singular countable nouns cannot normally be used without an article. Also, the article the is used before a specific place such as the next lane.

× I always used to have this training wheels.

✓ I always used to have these training wheels.

Training wheels is a plural noun, so it must be modified by the plural demonstrative these, not the singular demonstrative this.

× I can't ride without them.

✓ I couldn't ride without them.

The student is describing a situation in childhood, so the past-tense form couldn't is more appropriate than the present-tense form can't.

× I used to uh, for the uh, of my bike a lot. I loved.

✓ I used to take care of my bike a lot. I loved it.

The first sentence is incomplete because it does not contain a complete verb phrase. The second sentence is also incomplete because loved needs an object in this context. Take care of completes the first sentence, and it provides the object of loved.

× When you're a kid yes, mostly not all adults used to bike these days.

✓ When you're a kid, yes, but most adults do not ride bikes these days.

The phrase these days refers to the present, so do not ride is more appropriate than used to bike, which describes a past habit. The conjunction but is also needed to connect the contrasting ideas clearly.

× When you're a kid yes, mostly not all adults used to bike these days.

✓ When you're a kid, yes, but most adults do not ride bikes these days.

The sentence presents two contrasting ideas: children commonly ride bikes, whereas adults generally do not. The conjunction but correctly signals this contrast and makes the sentence structure complete.

× When you're a kid yes, mostly not all adults used to bike these days.

✓ When you're a kid, yes, but most adults do not ride bikes these days.

When talking about the activity in general, the plural noun bikes is more appropriate after ride. The plural form refers to bikes generally rather than to one particular bike.

× A lot of people are a lot of people who bike these days that are really young kids who doesn't have a motorcycle yet.

✓ A lot of the people who bike these days are really young kids who do not have motorcycles yet.

The original sentence repeats a lot of people and incorrectly places the relative clauses, which makes the structure difficult to follow. The corrected version uses who bike to identify the people and uses are to connect the subject with its description.

× Kids who doesn't have a motorcycle yet.

✓ Kids who do not have motorcycles yet.

The subject kids is plural, so it must be followed by the plural auxiliary do, not the singular form does. Therefore, doesn't must be changed to do not or don't.