自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a more natural topic sentence, such as “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.” Replace “of red and black color” with “It was red and black” or “It was painted red and black.” You could also add a specific reason why you liked the bike or explain how often you rode it. Avoid repeating “bike” unnecessarily, and use linking words such as “because” or “so” to connect your ideas.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was painted red and black, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school. I especially enjoyed cycling with my childhood friends because it was a fun way to spend time together.

建議: Answer the question directly and organize your ideas more clearly. “By the way” is not suitable here because it introduces an unrelated shift; use “In addition” or “Nowadays” instead. Since “bikes” is plural, use “them” rather than “it,” and say “transport goods” instead of “transport the goods.” Be more specific by distinguishing between bicycles used for commuting and motorcycles or bicycles used for deliveries.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in smaller towns and crowded cities. Many people use them to commute because they are inexpensive and convenient. In addition, some delivery workers use bicycles or motorbikes to transport goods, while others ride them for exercise.

× It was of red and black color.

✓ It was red and black.

The preposition of is used incorrectly in this sentence. When describing the color of an object, use the adjective directly after the verb be. A more natural pattern is It was red and black. Avoid the phrase of ... color in this context.

× By the way, more people use it to transport the goods or travel.

✓ By the way, more people use them to transport goods or travel.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Therefore, use the plural pronoun them. The article the is unnecessary before goods when referring to goods in general. Also, use parallel verb forms: transport goods or travel.