自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and includes specific details, such as the type of bike, your age, and who you played with. However, use more natural expressions: say “I was very young” instead of “I was a small kid,” and “my father gave it to me” instead of “my father gifted it to me.” The final sentence is unclear because riding the bus does not logically connect with having a tricycle; you probably mean “we used to ride our bikes around the garden.” Try to organize the answer with a direct opening, followed by reasons and details.

範例: Yes, I had a tricycle when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my fifth birthday, and I was thrilled because I had wanted one for a long time. I often rode it around our big garden with my sister and some friends. It was one of my favorite toys at that age.

建議: You give a clear general opinion and make a useful comparison with Australia, but several phrases are unnatural or incomplete. Avoid redundancy in “usually bikes are mostly used”; say “Bikes are mainly used by children for fun.” The phrase “adults use bikes reality” is unclear, so express the idea directly, for example, “Adults rarely use bicycles for transportation.” Also, explain why bikes are less popular among adults in your country, such as heavy traffic, long distances, or a lack of cycling lanes. Use a linking word such as “However” to introduce the comparison with Australia.

範例: No, not particularly. In my country, bicycles are mainly used by children for fun, while adults rarely use them for transportation. This may be because many cities have heavy traffic and few dedicated cycling lanes. However, when I visited Australia, I noticed that adults often cycled to work or exercised on bicycles.

× I would rather say the adults use bikes reality but here in Australia I have seen people quite often use bicycles.

✓ I would rather say that adults use bikes in reality, but here in Australia, I have quite often seen people use bicycles.

Reality is a noun and cannot be used directly as an adverb in this sentence. The correct adverbial phrase is in reality. Adding that after say also makes the sentence structure clearer. Quite often is correctly used as an adverbial phrase, but placing it before seen makes the sentence easier to understand.

× I would rather say the adults use bikes reality but here in Australia I have seen people quite often use bicycles.

✓ I would rather say that adults use bikes in reality, but here in Australia, I have quite often seen people use bicycles.

The original sentence contains two contrasting ideas joined without clear punctuation or structure. Use that after say to introduce the statement, and place a comma before but to separate the two independent clauses. A comma after Australia also improves the structure of the introductory phrase.