自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly, then describe the bike and explain how you used it. Improve accuracy and naturalness by saying “a small bicycle with training wheels,” “I used to ride it,” and “quiet streets” instead of “a small ride bike,” “it had a training,” and “quiet sticks.” Keep your verb tenses consistent: use the past tense “practised” for childhood activities. Use a linking word such as “At first” or “Moreover” to connect supporting details, and avoid unclear phrases like “visit.”

範例: Yes, I had a small bicycle with training wheels when I was a child. At first, my parents helped me ride it, and I gradually learned to cycle on my own. I used to ride to the park with my friends, and we practised on quiet streets almost every weekend.

建議: State your opinion clearly and use the correct subject and adjectives: “Bikes are quite popular” and “practical for short journeys.” Explain that they are affordable and convenient, then give a clear comparison between cities and rural areas. Replace unclear expressions such as “I got,” “many people's,” “CIC Pike,” and “rules area” with “many people,” “cycle,” and “rural areas.” Use plural nouns and articles accurately, for example, “short journeys” and “prefer cars.”

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short journeys. For example, many people cycle to work, school, or the market, especially in cities where traffic is heavy. However, people in rural areas usually prefer cars because distances are longer and public transport is less convenient.

× It is a small ride bike.

✓ It was a small bike.

The question asks about the speaker's childhood, so the past tense was is needed instead of the present tense is. The phrase ride bike is also not grammatically natural; bike is sufficient here.

× My parents loved me and it had a training while at first it used to ride to the park and visit.

✓ My parents loved me, and the bike had training wheels. At first, I used to ride it to the park and visit my friends.

The original sentence incorrectly makes the bike the subject of used to ride. A bike cannot ride by itself, so the subject should be I. The ideas should also be separated into two sentences to make the structure clear.

× My parents loved me and it had a training while at first it used to ride to the park and visit.

✓ My parents loved me, and the bike had training wheels. At first, I used to ride it to the park and visit my friends.

The pronoun it refers to the bike, but the person riding the bike should be I. When referring to the bike as the object of ride, use it after the verb: ride it.

× My friend and I practice on quiet sticks almost every weekend.

✓ My friend and I practiced on quiet streets almost every weekend.

Because the answer describes a past childhood habit, the past-tense form practiced is more appropriate than the present-tense form practice.

× Yes, I think I got quite popular in my country because they are cheap and practice for short journey.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and practical for short journeys.

The sentence describes the current popularity of bikes, so the present-tense verb are is needed. Bikes are plural, so the correct subject is bikes, not I. The adjective practical is required because it describes bikes.

× Yes, I think I got quite popular in my country because they are cheap and practice for short journey.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and practical for short journeys.

Practice is a noun or a verb, but the sentence needs an adjective to describe bikes. The correct adjective is practical.

× Yes, I think I got quite popular in my country because they are cheap and practice for short journey.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and practical for short journeys.

The general idea refers to journeys in the plural, so journeys is more appropriate than the singular form journey.

× For example, many people's uh right to walk or to the market in CIC Pike in the city, but in rules area people usually prefer car.

✓ For example, many people ride bikes to work or to the market in the city, but in rural areas, people usually prefer cars.

The first part of the original sentence does not contain a correctly formed clause. It needs a subject, a verb, and a clear destination: many people ride bikes to work or to the market. The corrected sentence also expresses the contrast more clearly.

× For example, many people's uh right to walk or to the market in CIC Pike in the city, but in rules area people usually prefer car.

✓ For example, many people ride bikes to work or to the market in the city, but in rural areas, people usually prefer cars.

People is already plural and should not be written as people's in this sentence. Cars should be plural because the sentence refers generally to the type of vehicle people prefer.

× For example, many people's uh right to walk or to the market in CIC Pike in the city, but in rules area people usually prefer car.

✓ For example, many people ride bikes to work or to the market in the city, but in rural areas, people usually prefer cars.

The phrase the city refers to a specific city context, so the definite article the is appropriate. The general phrase rural areas does not need an article.