自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Use the past tense consistently because the question refers to your childhood: “I had,” “I was,” and “I liked.” Also, “I was a child” and “I liked riding my bike” are more natural expressions than “I was child” and “I like a little bike.” Answer the question directly, then add one specific detail about how or where you used the bike. Avoid the vague phrase “It’s so funny”; explain what was enjoyable about it.

範例: Yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. I really enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood after school. It was fun because I could explore the area and spend time outdoors with my friends.

建議: Give a complete topic sentence first, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Then explain why using a clear linking word like “because.” The phrase “Lloyd, Michael” is unclear and does not support your answer; replace it with a specific reason, such as reducing traffic, saving money, or improving people's health. Use the plural form “bikes” and the natural expression “riding bikes is healthy.”

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people and commuters. This is because cycling is good for people’s health and helps them avoid traffic jams. In addition, bikes are relatively cheap and environmentally friendly.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past, using did and were you a child. Therefore, use the past-tense verb had instead of the present-tense verb have.

× I was child and I like a little bike.

✓ I was a child, and I liked my little bike.

A singular countable noun such as child needs an article, so say a child. Also, my is more natural than a before little bike when referring to the student's own bike.

× I was child and I like a little bike.

✓ I was a child, and I liked my little bike.

The answer describes a past experience, so like should be changed to its past-tense form, liked.

× It's so funny.

✓ It was so fun.

Because the student is describing a bike from childhood, use the past-tense form was. Fun is more appropriate than funny here because fun describes an enjoyable experience, while funny usually means amusing or causing laughter.

× Popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

The original sentence is missing a verb. Add bikes as the subject and are as the verb to form a complete sentence.

× Yes, I think. Uh. Popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

The ideas are separated into incomplete fragments. Combine them into one complete sentence with the subject bikes and the verb are.

× Because Lloyd, Michael. Have for all healthy.

✓ Because riding bikes is healthy for everyone.

The original wording does not form a clear grammatical sentence. Use riding bikes as the subject, is as the verb, and healthy for everyone to express the intended reason clearly.