自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and provide a specific memory, which is effective. However, avoid fillers such as “umm,” and improve the phrasing: say “a dark-colored bicycle with stabilizers” rather than “a dark bicycle with stabilizers on.” Use the past tense consistently because you are describing your childhood. You could also explain briefly why this memory was special.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a dark-colored bicycle with stabilizers, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood with a close friend. It was my first taste of independence, so riding it is one of my fondest childhood memories.

建議: You give two relevant reasons, but the answer contains many fillers and repetitions, including “umm,” “like,” and “reason.” Improve accuracy by saying “I’d say so” instead of “I’ll pretty say so,” and “shared e-bikes” instead of “shared E bike.” Organize the response with a clear topic sentence and linking words such as “For one thing” and “In addition.” Replace the informal phrase “beat traffic” with “avoid traffic congestion” if you want a more precise expression.

範例: Yes, I’d say bikes are quite popular in my country for several reasons. For one thing, many people ride them as a hobby or for exercise. In addition, shared e-bikes are convenient for short journeys because they help commuters avoid traffic congestion.

× It's a dark bicycle with stabilizers on, and I used to ride it in my neighborhood with my friend.

✓ It was a dark bicycle with stabilizers on, and I used to ride it in my neighborhood with my friend.

The question asks about a childhood experience, so the description should use the past tense. Change is to was because the bicycle is being described as it was in the past.

× Umm, yes, I'll pretty say so, but for different reasons.

✓ Umm, yes, I would pretty much say so, but for different reasons.

Pretty cannot normally be placed directly before the verb say in this expression. The natural phrase is pretty much say so. I would also sounds more natural than I'll when giving a cautious opinion.

× People use it as a hobby, like cycling.

✓ People use them for hobbies such as cycling.

The topic is bikes, which is plural, so the pronoun should be them rather than it. Also, use them for hobbies is more appropriate than use it as a hobby when referring to bicycles in general.

× So one is people use it as like a hobby like cycling and the other reason is people ride shared E bike for like those short trips to beat traffic which is more convenient.

✓ One reason is that people use bikes for hobbies such as cycling, and the other reason is that people ride shared e-bikes on short trips to avoid traffic, which is more convenient.

The original sentence has two incomplete structures: one is people and the other reason is people. Use the pattern one reason is that ... and the other reason is that ... to connect the ideas correctly. Remove the unnecessary words as like and replace like with such as when giving an example. Use the plural form e-bikes because the sentence refers to shared bikes in general.