自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答内容切题，也提供了购买自行车的原因和背景，结构基本清楚。但要注意时态和语法：过去的经历应使用过去时，例如“had”“wanted”“told”和“bought”；“in my primary school at grade one”不自然，可以说“when I was in Grade One”。此外，“everyone, almost everyone”重复，“So”连续使用影响流畅度。可以使用“because”“as a result”等连接词，并补充一个具体细节，例如自行车的颜色或你如何使用它。

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it as a birthday present from my parents when I was in Grade One because almost everyone in my class had one. It was a small blue bike, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school.

建議: 回答开头直接回应了问题，但后半部分出现明显的重复、句子中断和语法问题，导致表达不完整。“you can you can”“scan the scan code”重复；“ride a useful mobile phone”意思不清，应改为“use a mobile phone to scan the QR code”；“personal ones”可以换成更自然的“privately owned bikes”。建议将答案拆成两到三句，并使用“in addition”“because”等连接词，说明共享单车为什么受欢迎，例如方便、便宜和环保。

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. In addition to privately owned bikes, many cities have public bike-sharing schemes. People can use a mobile phone to scan a QR code and pay for a bike, so cycling is a convenient and inexpensive way to travel, especially for short distances.

× Yes, I have one.

✓ Yes, I had one.

问题中的问题是“Did you have...?”，询问的是过去的经历，因此回答也要使用一般过去时。应将“have”改为“had”。

× When I was in my primary school at grade one, everyone, almost everyone in my class have their own bike.

✓ When I was in Grade One at primary school, everyone, or almost everyone, in my class had their own bike.

表示“在几年级”时，通常使用“in Grade One”；“at grade one”不自然。建议记住：in Grade One, in Grade Two。

× When I was in my primary school at grade one, everyone, almost everyone in my class have their own bike.

✓ When I was in Grade One at primary school, everyone, or almost everyone, in my class had their own bike.

这段话描述的是童年时的情况，应使用一般过去时，所以“have”要改为“had”。

× Everyone, almost everyone in my class have their own bike.

✓ Everyone, or almost everyone, in my class had their own bike.

“Everyone”虽然表示很多人，但语法上是单数主语，不能搭配“have”。在过去时中应使用单数形式“had”。

× So I also want one.

✓ So I also wanted one.

上下文讲的是童年时期的愿望，因此“want”应使用过去式“wanted”。

× So I told my mom and dad to buy me one and they send me as my birthday gift.

✓ So I told my mom and dad to buy me one, and they sent me one as a birthday gift.

“told”已经是过去式，因此后面的动作也应使用过去时。“send”应改为“sent”。另外，“sent me one”比“sent me”更完整，因为“one”指代一辆自行车。

× We not only have the personal ones you can ride, there are also many public bikes that you can you can ride a useful mobile phone to scan the scan code on the bike and pay for it I think bike is a

✓ We not only have personal bikes that you can ride, but we also have many public bikes. You can use a mobile phone to scan the QR code on a bike and pay for it.

“not only”通常要和“but also”搭配，形成完整的并列结构。原句还把多个意思连接在一起，导致句子不清楚。建议使用“not only...but also...”并把长句拆成几个短句。

× We not only have the personal ones you can ride, there are also many public bikes that you can you can ride a useful mobile phone to scan the scan code on the bike and pay for it I think bike is a

✓ We have both personal bikes and public bikes. You can ride them, use a mobile phone to scan the QR code, and pay for the ride.

原句包含重复的“you can”、多个连续的独立意思，以及未完成的“I think bike is a”，属于句子结构混乱和残缺。建议一个句子只表达一个主要意思，并将过长的句子拆开。