自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly in the past tense: “No, I didn’t.” Use “when I was a child” instead of “when I was kid,” and say “I didn’t have” rather than “I don’t have.” Avoid repetition, hesitation, and unfinished sentences. Also, clarify the idea about bicycles: explain whether your family rented bicycles occasionally or whether you simply preferred outdoor games. Use a linking word such as “instead” to connect the reason.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family usually preferred outdoor games, such as football and hide-and-seek, instead of cycling. We occasionally rented bicycles, but we never bought one because I wasn’t particularly interested in riding.

建議: State your opinion clearly and support it with one or two specific reasons. Avoid repeating words such as “popular” and “but,” and do not refer to information as “we told earlier”; simply explain the contrast directly. Correct “in past there was not very much in time” to a natural phrase such as “In the past, bicycles were less common.” Complete your final sentence and use a linking word such as “however” to make the comparison clear.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. However, they were less common in the past because many children preferred playing outdoor games like football. Nowadays, more people also ride bicycles for exercise and short journeys.

× Actually, when I was kid, I don't have a bike.

✓ Actually, when I was a kid, I didn't have a bike.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use didn't have instead of don't have for a past situation.

× Actually, when I was kid, I don't have a bike.

✓ Actually, when I was a kid, I didn't have a bike.

The singular countable noun kid needs the indefinite article a. Say a kid, not kid.

× We generally use outdoor games more preferably, uh, rather than this kind of toys.

✓ We generally preferred outdoor games to these kinds of toys.

The student is describing a past preference, so preferred is more appropriate than use. The preposition to is also the natural choice after preferred.

× We generally use outdoor games more preferably, uh, rather than this kind of toys.

✓ We generally preferred outdoor games to these kinds of toys.

More preferably is awkward and unnecessary here. Use the verb preferred to express a choice between two activities or things.

× We generally use outdoor games more preferably, uh, rather than this kind of toys.

✓ We generally preferred outdoor games to these kinds of toys.

These modifies the plural noun kinds, and toys is also plural. Therefore, these kinds of toys is grammatically consistent.

× And uh, we don't have a bike And uh, even we have a rented cycle or after that, we have the own cycle, but we don't have a.

✓ We didn't have a bike. We sometimes rented bicycles, and later we had our own bicycle, but at first, we didn't have one.

The response refers to the student's childhood, so the past tense is required. Use didn't have, rented, and had instead of the present-tense forms.

× And uh, we don't have a bike And uh, even we have a rented cycle or after that, we have the own cycle, but we don't have a.

✓ We didn't have a bike. We sometimes rented bicycles, and later we had our own bicycle, but at first, we didn't have one.

The phrase the own cycle is incorrect. Use the possessive pronoun our before own: our own bicycle. At the end, one correctly replaces the repeated noun bicycle.

× And uh, we don't have a bike And uh, even we have a rented cycle or after that, we have the own cycle, but we don't have a.

✓ We didn't have a bike. We sometimes rented bicycles, and later we had our own bicycle, but at first, we didn't have one.

The final phrase we don't have a is incomplete because the article a must be followed by a noun. The pronoun one completes the meaning and avoids repeating bicycle.

× Yes, definitely bikes are very much popular popular in our country but in but as we told earlier in past there was not very much in time.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in our country, but, as I mentioned earlier, they were not very common in the past.

Very popular is the natural expression. Very much popular is not normally used before the adjective popular. The repeated word popular should also be removed.

× Yes, definitely bikes are very much popular popular in our country but in but as we told earlier in past there was not very much in time.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in our country, but, as I mentioned earlier, they were not very common in the past.

The phrase refers to an earlier period, so use the past-tense form were. The plural subject bikes requires were, not was.

× Yes, definitely bikes are very much popular popular in our country but in but as we told earlier in past there was not very much in time.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in our country, but, as I mentioned earlier, they were not very common in the past.

When the student is referring to their own earlier statement, use I mentioned rather than we told. The pronoun I is appropriate because the student is the speaker who made the earlier comment.

× Yes, definitely bikes are very much popular popular in our country but in but as we told earlier in past there was not very much in time.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in our country, but, as I mentioned earlier, they were not very common in the past.

The expression in the past requires the definite article the. Do not say in past.

× At that time children generally used to play outdo games rather than

✓ At that time, children generally used to play outdoor games rather than ride bikes.

The sentence is incomplete because rather than must be followed by the alternative activity being compared. Adding ride bikes makes the comparison grammatically complete.

× At that time children generally used to play outdo games rather than

✓ At that time, children generally used to play outdoor games rather than ride bikes.

The phrase rather than needs a clear comparison object or activity. Ride bikes provides the activity that is being contrasted with playing outdoor games.