自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and use natural, accurate vocabulary. The phrase “children's grain are played well played” is unclear, and “play on ticks” is not the correct expression; you probably mean “play traditional games” or “play with sticks.” Avoid fillers such as “like,” and connect your contrasting ideas with “instead.” Give one or two specific examples of games children played instead of riding bikes.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I grew up playing traditional Filipino games with other children, such as marbles, rubber-band games, and games with sticks. These activities were inexpensive and were very popular in my neighborhood.

建議: State your main idea clearly by saying whether bikes are popular and where. Then explain the difference between wealthier and poorer communities. Use complete sentences and avoid fillers such as “like.” The answer is unfinished, so clearly explain that some families prioritize essential expenses over recreational items. Use accurate expressions such as “afford a bicycle” rather than “provide such recreational toys.”

範例: Bikes are popular in some parts of the Philippines, but they are not equally common everywhere. In poorer communities, many families cannot afford bicycles because they need to spend their money on basic necessities. However, children in wealthier areas often ride bikes for transportation, exercise, and recreation.

× Luckily I grew up in the Philippines where lots and lots of children's grain are played well played.

✓ Luckily, I grew up in the Philippines, where lots and lots of children's games were played.

The phrase lots and lots of requires a plural noun. Games is the appropriate plural noun in this context, not grain.

× Luckily I grew up in the Philippines where lots and lots of children's grain are played well played.

✓ Luckily, I grew up in the Philippines, where lots and lots of children's games were played.

The speaker is describing childhood in the past, so the verb should be in the past tense. Were played agrees with the past time reference.

× Luckily I grew up in the Philippines where lots and lots of children's grain are played well played.

✓ Luckily, I grew up in the Philippines, where lots and lots of children's games were played.

The original phrase are played well played contains an incorrect and repeated verb structure. The passive form were played is correct because the games receive the action.

× Luckily I grew up in the Philippines where lots and lots of children's grain are played well played.

✓ Luckily, I grew up in the Philippines, where lots and lots of children's games were played.

The original sentence contains a malformed clause with repeated and incorrectly arranged words. Use a clear relative clause beginning with where and finish it with the complete verb phrase were played.

× I was able to like play on ticks, marbles, rubber bands.

✓ I was able to play with sticks, marbles, and rubber bands.

Use with when describing activities involving objects or toys. Play on is not appropriate for sticks, marbles, and rubber bands in this context.

× I believe only for some parts in the Philippines.

✓ I believe bikes are popular only in some parts of the Philippines.

The original sentence is incomplete because believe is not followed by a complete idea. Add the subject and verb bikes are popular to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I believe only for some parts in the Philippines.

✓ I believe bikes are popular only in some parts of the Philippines.

Use in, not for, when referring to locations or areas where something is popular. The correct phrase is in some parts of the Philippines.

× None of the children then or even the families were able to like provide such recreational toys when they could possibly just spend

✓ None of the children there, or even their families, were able to provide such recreational toys because they could not afford to spend money on them.

There refers to the location, whereas then refers to time. Since the sentence discusses children in a place, there is the appropriate adverb. The added phrase spend money on them completes the meaning of spend.

× None of the children then or even the families were able to like provide such recreational toys when they could possibly just spend

✓ None of the children there, or even their families, were able to provide such recreational toys because they could not afford to spend money on them.

The original sentence ends with an incomplete clause: when they could possibly just spend. A complete sentence needs an object after spend and a clear connection between the ideas. Because they could not afford to spend money on them expresses the intended reason.