自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly in the past tense: say “Yes, I did” instead of “Yes, I do,” and use “had” rather than “have.” Explain the bike clearly and avoid hesitations and unclear phrases such as “that's by have” and “the two additions view.” Use accurate vocabulary such as “training wheels” and connect the details with linking words like “at first” and “later.”

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle when I was about four years old. It had four wheels, with two training wheels at the back, so I could balance more easily. Later, when I became more confident, my parents removed the training wheels.

建議: Use the plural form consistently: “bikes are popular” and “we use bicycles.” Include articles in phrases such as “a small district” and replace the unclear expression “translate translations” with “get around” or “travel.” Give a specific reason and link your ideas clearly, for example, explain that bicycles are used both for transportation and exercise.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in Thailand, especially in smaller towns and districts. I live in a small district where the traffic is not too heavy, so many people use bikes to get around. In addition, cycling is a convenient way to exercise and is cheaper than driving.

× Yes, I do.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about a situation in the past, so the answer should use the past-tense auxiliary did, not the present-tense auxiliary do.

× I have a bike when I was about four years old that's by have 4 four wheels, uh one in the front and three in the back.

✓ I had a bike when I was about four years old. It had four wheels—one in the front and three in the back.

Because the speaker is describing childhood, the past tense had is required instead of the present-tense have. The sentence is also divided into two sentences to make the past-tense description clear.

× I have a bike when I was about four years old that's by have 4 four wheels, uh one in the front and three in the back.

✓ I had a bike when I was about four years old. It had four wheels—one in the front and three in the back.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and confused clauses, including that's by have. Use two complete sentences with a clear subject and verb. Avoid repeating a number such as 4 four.

× So, uh, when I can ride that bicycle, my parents just took out the 2 additions view so it's complete.

✓ When I could ride that bicycle, my parents took out the two additional wheels, so it became a regular bicycle.

The ability to ride occurred in the past, so could should be used instead of can. The past-tense verb took is also consistent with the past context.

× So, uh, when I can ride that bicycle, my parents just took out the 2 additions view so it's complete.

✓ When I could ride that bicycle, my parents took out the two additional wheels, so it became a regular bicycle.

The sentence describes events that happened during childhood. Therefore, became is needed instead of the present-tense is. Use the past tense consistently when answering a question about the past.

× Of course it's popular in my country.

✓ Of course, bikes are popular in my country.

The subject bikes is plural, so it must be followed by the plural verb are. The singular form is popular does not agree with the intended plural subject.

× I live in small district in Thailand so the traffic is not that bad.

✓ I live in a small district in Thailand, so the traffic is not that bad.

A singular countable noun such as district needs an article. Use a because this is one nonspecific district. A comma before so also helps separate the two clauses.

× We usually use bicycle to, uh, translate translations and as an exercise.

✓ We usually use bicycles for transportation and exercise.

When speaking generally about bicycles, use the plural form bicycles or the singular form a bicycle. The plural form is more natural here because the sentence describes a general habit.

× We usually use bicycle to, uh, translate translations and as an exercise.

✓ We usually use bicycles for transportation and exercise.

The preposition for is used to describe a purpose: use bicycles for transportation. The phrase to translate translations is not the correct expression for this meaning. Use transportation to describe traveling from place to place.