自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and connect your ideas with clear linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea in “precious memory,” “always cherish,” and “beautiful moments.” Use a natural structure such as “My dad gave me one when...” instead of “my dad gifted to me,” and mention one specific memory to make the answer more developed.

範例: Yes, I did. My dad gave me a bike for my seventh birthday, and I was absolutely delighted because it was my first one. I remember riding it around our neighborhood with my friends after school, so it holds a special place in my memory.

建議: Begin with a complete topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.” Correct the grammar and word choice: use “a convenient method,” “the government encourages,” and “they are easy to maneuver.” Replace “interesting parties government” and “in the hectic” with precise expressions such as “local authorities” and “in heavy traffic.” Organize the reasons with linking words and avoid packing too many ideas into one sentence.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. They are a convenient and affordable way to get around, and the government encourages cycling because it helps reduce air pollution. In addition, bicycles are easy to maneuver through heavy traffic.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child my dad gifted to me when I turned 7 years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child that my dad gave me when I turned seven years old.

The original sentence contains two independent parts joined without a suitable conjunction or relative pronoun. Adding that introduces the relative clause describing the bike. Give me is also the more natural verb pattern in this context. You can avoid run-on sentences by using a conjunction, a relative pronoun, or a full stop.

× Yeah, definitely so very popular in our country.

✓ Yeah, definitely. Bikes are very popular in our country.

The original sentence has no main verb. Bikes are is needed to form a complete sentence. Remember that every complete English sentence normally requires a subject and a verb.

× People always use it as a convenient method of transportation and the interesting parties government also encourage people to use bicycles more because it helps to reduce environmental pollution and it's pretty easy to maneuver in the hectic.

✓ People always use them as a convenient method of transportation, and the government also encourages people to use bicycles more because they help reduce environmental pollution and are easy to maneuver in hectic traffic.

The pronouns it and it's refer to bicycles, which is plural, so they and they are required. The original sentence also uses the adjective hectic as if it were a noun. Use a noun after an adjective, such as hectic traffic. Make sure that pronouns agree with the nouns they refer to in number.

× People always use it as a convenient method of transportation and the interesting parties government also encourage people to use bicycles more because it helps to reduce environmental pollution and it's pretty easy to maneuver in the hectic.

✓ People always use them as a convenient method of transportation, and the government also encourages people to use bicycles more because they help reduce environmental pollution and are easy to maneuver in hectic traffic.

The subject government is singular, so the present-tense verb must be encourages, not encourage. In the present simple, add s or es to the verb when the subject is he, she, it, or a singular noun. The phrase the government is also the correct noun phrase here.