自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ по существу дан, но есть заметные проблемы с естественностью, грамматикой и точностью слов. Используйте “training wheels”, а не “training vehicles”, и “ride”, а не “write”. Фраза “I felt like an adult” звучит естественнее, чем “I felt as a adult”. Также завершите последнюю мысль: вместо “I realized I like” скажите “I realized that I liked cycling”. Избегайте повторов “it was it was” и начните с прямого ответа, например “Yes, I did.”

範例: Yes, I did. I had a favorite blue bike, and I learned to ride it without training wheels when I was quite young. I felt like an adult because I could cycle around the neighborhood by myself. That was when I realized I really enjoyed cycling.

建議: Ответ хорошо организован: есть мнение, причина и пример, а также связующие слова “For example” и “So”. Однако исправьте грамматику: “because the weather is better” вместо “because it's the special weather”, “many people are on vacation” вместо “more people have their vacation”, и “families go to parks and ride bikes” вместо “families going to the parks and ride the bike”. Для большей конкретности можно упомянуть велосипедные дорожки, парки или совместные семейные поездки.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular, although it depends on the season. They are especially common in summer because the weather is warmer and many people are on vacation. For example, families often go to parks and ride bikes together, while some people cycle to avoid traffic.

× I really felt as a adult.

✓ I really felt like an adult.

The article a is used before consonant sounds, while an is used before vowel sounds. Adult begins with a vowel sound, so an adult is required. Also, felt like is the correct expression for describing a feeling or impression.

× That was the moment when I realized I like bikes.

✓ That was the moment when I realized I liked bikes.

The main verb realized is in the past tense, so the verb in the following clause is normally backshifted from like to liked when reporting a past thought. Use liked to keep the reported idea consistent with the past context.

× A lot of families going to the parks and ride the bike with their children.

✓ A lot of families go to parks and ride bikes with their children.

The original sentence is missing a finite verb before going. For a general situation, use the present simple: go and ride. Because families usually use more than one bicycle, bikes is more appropriate than the singular the bike.

× A lot of families going to the parks and ride the bike with their children.

✓ A lot of families go to parks and ride bikes with their children.

The plural subject families refers to a general activity involving bicycles, so the plural noun bikes is more suitable than the singular noun bike. The sentence also needs the present-simple verbs go and ride.