自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly, then give one or two specific details. Avoid repeated words such as “just” and improve the unclear sentence structure. Use natural expressions such as “My parents gave it to me” instead of “it was gifted by my parents,” and explain what kind of bike it was. Also, make sure every sentence is grammatically complete.

範例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My parents gave it to me for my second birthday, although it was a small tricycle because I was still very young. I loved riding it around our yard, and it was my first experience of cycling.

建議: Begin with a clear answer and then explain the reasons logically. The second sentence contains several grammatical and linking problems, particularly “by bikes and just on because” and “in this is quite popular.” Use linking words such as “because” or “as a result,” and provide a specific example of how people use bicycles in your area.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in rural areas like mine. People often ride them to nearby shops, schools, or farms because these places are usually within a short distance. In addition, cycling is inexpensive and provides regular exercise, so it remains a convenient form of transport.

× We especially for child, I really liked it.

✓ As a child, I really liked it.

The singular noun child needs the article a in this expression. However, as a child is the natural phrase when describing your experience during childhood. Do not use for child in this context.

× We especially for child, I really liked it.

✓ As a child, I really liked it.

The original sentence has an incomplete and incorrectly ordered phrase, We especially for child. The phrase is not connected correctly to the main clause. Use the introductory phrase As a child, followed by the complete clause I really liked it.

× That was my first bike ever and just because I was a little too young and I was just able to walk, it was just a simpler bike.

✓ That was my first bike ever. Because I was very young and could only walk, it was a simple bike.

Simpler is a comparative adjective and normally requires a clear comparison. Since no comparison is being made, use the positive form simple. The sentence is also clearer when divided into two sentences.

× People here travel short distances by bikes and just on because it helps to get more physical activity in this is quite popular.

✓ People here travel short distances by bike because cycling helps them get more physical activity, so it is quite popular.

When by is used to describe a general means of transportation, the singular form is normally used: by bike, by car, or by train. Use by bikes only when referring to specific bikes or multiple bicycles.

× People here travel short distances by bikes and just on because it helps to get more physical activity in this is quite popular.

✓ People here travel short distances by bike because cycling helps them get more physical activity, so it is quite popular.

The original sentence contains the incomplete sequence and just on and incorrectly joins several ideas with because and in. Organize the sentence into a clear cause-and-effect structure: people travel by bike because cycling provides physical activity, so cycling is popular.