自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating the same idea in the second sentence. Use the natural phrase “I didn’t have a bike” instead of “I did not have any bike.” Also, “my parents did not support me to ride a bike” is unnatural; say “my parents didn’t encourage me to ride one.” Be careful with the explanation because saying you could not ride a bike simply because you were a girl may sound too general. Add one specific detail about your childhood to make the answer more effective.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents didn’t encourage me to ride one because they thought it was unsafe for girls in our neighborhood. Instead, I usually played outdoor games with my friends.

建議: Use a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating “in my country” and “that’s why.” The correct plural form is “bikes are,” not “bike are,” and “bike riding is popular,” not “bike is very famous.” Also, “the boys of our country, their favorite hobby” is grammatically incorrect and too narrow; explain popularity with specific reasons such as affordability, convenience, exercise, or traffic. Use linking words such as “mainly because” and “in addition” to organize your ideas.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. They are relatively affordable and convenient for short journeys, so many people use them to exercise or travel to school. In addition, cycling can help people avoid heavy traffic.

× No, I did not have any bike because I am a girl and my parents did not support me to ride a bike.

✓ No, I did not have a bike because I was a girl and my parents did not support me in riding a bike.

The question asks about the speaker's childhood, so the past tense was is more consistent than am. The phrase was a girl refers to her childhood. Also, support is normally followed by an object and in + gerund when describing help or encouragement, so support me in riding is correct.

× No, I did not have any bike because I am a girl and my parents did not support me to ride a bike.

✓ No, I did not have a bike because I was a girl and my parents did not support me in riding a bike.

After support someone in, the following verb should be in the -ing form. Therefore, riding is correct instead of to ride. A useful pattern is support someone in doing something.

× Yes, bike are very popular in my country because the boys of our countries, their favorite hobby is bike riding and that's why our country, that's why in our country by is very famous.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many boys consider bike riding their favorite hobby.

The plural noun bikes is needed because the sentence refers to bikes in general. The phrase our countries is also incorrect because the speaker is referring to one country; use my country or our country. The word by should be bike, and the repeated phrases make the sentence unclear.

× Yes, bike are very popular in my country because the boys of our countries, their favorite hobby is bike riding and that's why our country, that's why in our country by is very famous.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many boys consider bike riding their favorite hobby.

The original sentence contains an incomplete and confusing structure: the boys of our countries, their favorite hobby is. Use a clear subject-verb-object structure, such as many boys consider bike riding their favorite hobby. Avoid repeating expressions such as that's why and in our country in the same sentence.