自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly and naturally, but avoid repetition and awkward phrases. “A red-coloured BMW company’s bike” is unclear; say “a red bike made by BMW” if that is what you mean. Also, “give a sight” is incorrect in this context; use “get out of the way” or “make way.” Keep the answer to four or five sentences and connect the details with linking words such as “because” and “although.”

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a red bike made by BMW, with white polka dots on it. I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends, especially during the summer holidays. We had a lot of fun exploring the streets together.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating the same idea. “Very much important” should be “very important,” and “day to day” should be “day-to-day.” Use “bicycles” or “motorbikes” consistently, since “bikes” can refer to either one. Improve sentence control by separating the long sentence and replace “a major it’s a big mode” with “a major form of transportation.” Add one specific reason, such as affordability or avoiding traffic.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use bicycles or motorbikes to commute to work, while children often ride them to school. They are especially useful because they are affordable and help people avoid traffic congestion. For this reason, bikes are an important form of transportation here.

× It was a red coloured BMW company's bike.

✓ It was a red BMW bike.

The original noun phrase contains an awkward sequence of modifiers. In English, the color adjective comes before the brand modifier, and coloured is unnecessary when red already describes the bike. A clearer adjective order is red BMW bike.

× We used to ride it on streets and yell at people to give a sight, to move.

✓ We used to ride it on the streets and yell at people to give a sight, to move.

The definite article the is used because the speaker is referring to the particular streets where they usually rode. Use the before a plural noun when the context identifies specific places.

× I think bikes are very much important in my country.

✓ I think bikes are very important in my country.

Very can directly modify the adjective important. Very much is generally used with verbs or expressions such as I like it very much, not before an ordinary adjective. Use very important here.

× A large number of people use bikes in their day to day lives, and they use it to travel to their workplaces.

✓ A large number of people use bikes in their day-to-day lives, and they use them to travel to their workplaces.

The pronoun must agree with its antecedent. Bikes is plural, so the correct object pronoun is them, not it. Use them when referring to more than one bike.

× Even children use it to travel to their schools.

✓ Even children use them to travel to their schools.

The sentence continues to refer to bikes, which is plural. Therefore, use the plural pronoun them instead of the singular pronoun it.

× So I think it helps people and it's a major it's a big mode of transportation here.

✓ So I think it helps people and is a major mode of transportation here.

The original sentence repeats the subject and contains an incomplete, disorganized phrase: it's a major it's a big. Use one clear noun phrase after and: is a major mode of transportation here.