自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly and then add a specific memory and a reason for using the bike. Improve the grammar and naturalness of several phrases: say “my parents gave it to me for my fourth birthday” instead of “I got this bike on my fourth birthday by my parents,” “at weekends” or “on weekends” instead of “on a weekend,” and “when I went to the park” instead of “whenever I was going to a park.” Use a linking word such as “because” to connect the activity with its purpose, and finish the answer with a full stop.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a small blue bike for my fourth birthday, and I was thrilled to receive it. I often rode it at weekends when I went to the park near my house because I enjoyed exploring the area and getting some exercise.

建議: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence and support it with specific groups of users and reasons. Replace unnatural phrases such as “I think so bikes are popular” with “I think bikes are quite popular,” and “roll up bikes” with “ride bikes” or “cycle.” Use the plural subject consistently: “Bikes don’t produce pollution,” and say “They are also cheaper than motorbikes.” Avoid repeating “as well as” and connect your ideas with “because,” “in addition,” or “compared with.”

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and older people. Many people ride them for exercise, short trips, or leisure. In addition, bikes are environmentally friendly because they do not produce exhaust fumes, and they are much cheaper to buy and maintain than motorbikes.

× I still remember I got this bike on my fourth birthday by my parents.

✓ I still remember that this bike was given to me by my parents on my fourth birthday.

The phrase got this bike by my parents incorrectly combines an active verb with a by-agent phrase. Use the passive structure was given to me by my parents, or use the active structure my parents gave me this bike.

× I usually rode this bike on a weekend whenever I was going to a park.

✓ I usually rode this bike on weekends whenever I went to a park.

On a weekend refers to one particular weekend, but the sentence describes a repeated habit. Use the plural form on weekends for regular activities.

× I usually rode this bike on a weekend whenever I was going to a park.

✓ I usually rode this bike on weekends whenever I went to a park.

The sentence describes repeated actions in the past, so the simple past went is more appropriate than the past continuous was going. Use the simple past for regular or repeated past events.

× Yes, I think so bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think so. Bikes are popular in my country.

I think so is a complete response and should not be directly followed by the statement bikes are popular. Separate the two ideas with a full stop, or say Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

× Apart from that, I think so the bikes are good for environment as well.

✓ Apart from that, I think bikes are good for the environment as well.

I think so cannot be followed directly by a noun clause in this structure. Use I think followed by the clause, such as I think bikes are good for the environment.

× Apart from that, I think so the bikes are good for environment as well.

✓ Apart from that, I think bikes are good for the environment as well.

Environment refers to the specific natural world around us, so it normally requires the definite article the. The correct phrase is the environment.

× It doesn't create any pollution as well as they are cheap as well as compared to motorbikes.

✓ Bikes do not create any pollution, and they are cheaper than motorbikes.

The subject bikes is plural, so it must take the plural verb do not create, not the singular form does not create. The plural pronoun they is also appropriate for bikes.

× It doesn't create any pollution as well as they are cheap as well as compared to motorbikes.

✓ Bikes do not create any pollution, and they are cheaper than motorbikes.

As well as is used incorrectly and is repeated in the original sentence. Use the coordinating conjunction and to connect the two related ideas clearly.

× It doesn't create any pollution as well as they are cheap as well as compared to motorbikes.

✓ Bikes do not create any pollution, and they are cheaper than motorbikes.

When comparing bikes with motorbikes, use the comparative form cheaper followed by than. The phrase cheap as well as compared to is not a correct comparative structure.