自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is contradictory: you first say that you did not have a bike, but then say that you definitely had one. Give a clear direct answer and avoid switching between “bike” and “bicycle” unnecessarily. The phrase “we as girls aren't allowed bikes as often” is unnatural; say “girls were not usually encouraged to ride bikes.” Also, the answer ends unfinished, so complete the anecdote or omit it. Use a linking word such as “Instead” to explain that you rode as a passenger on your brother’s bike.

範例: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child because girls in my society were not usually encouraged to ride them. Instead, I sometimes sat on the back of my brother’s bicycle when we went around our neighbourhood. I really enjoyed those rides, although I always wished I had a bike of my own.

建議: You answer the question directly and give relevant reasons, but several expressions need correction. Say “Bikes are very popular,” not “very much popular,” and replace “every man wanna bike” with “many people own or ride bikes.” Avoid overgeneralising that every man rides a bike, and complete the final sentence. Add one specific supporting detail, such as affordability, fuel efficiency, or traffic congestion, and connect the ideas clearly with “Moreover” or “For this reason.”

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in Lahore. Many people use them as an affordable and fuel-efficient way to travel through busy streets. Moreover, motorcycles are often cheaper to maintain than cars, so they are a practical choice for commuting to work or university.

× I used to sit beside my brother on bike.

✓ I used to sit beside my brother on a bike.

The singular countable noun bike needs an indefinite article because it is mentioned generally and is not a specific bike. Use a before a singular countable noun when referring to one non-specific item.

× I would love to tell you an incident.

✓ I would love to tell you about an incident.

The verb tell normally takes the preposition about when introducing the subject of a story or event. The correct pattern is tell someone about something.

× I was sitting beside my brother and he just.

✓ I was sitting beside my brother when something suddenly happened.

The original sentence is incomplete because he just does not have a complete predicate or an accompanying action. A complete sentence must express a full idea with a subject and a complete verb phrase.

× Yes, bikes are very much popular in our country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country.

Popular is an adjective that is normally modified by very, not very much. Use very before common gradable adjectives such as popular, expensive, and interesting.

× You'll see every man wanna bike on the streets of Lahore.

✓ You'll see every man want a bike on the streets of Lahore.

This sentence needs the verb want after every man. However, because every man is grammatically singular, the fully correct form is wants. The correction also replaces the informal spoken form wanna with the standard form want to when appropriate.

× You'll see every man wanna bike on the streets of Lahore.

✓ You'll see every man want a bike on the streets of Lahore.

The singular countable noun bike requires the indefinite article a when referring to one non-specific bike. Say a bike, not simply bike.

× because typically a.

✓ because it is typically affordable.

The original fragment does not contain a complete verb phrase and therefore cannot stand as a clause. Add the subject it and the verb is to form a complete clause.