自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and avoid repetition. Use the past tense consistently: say “I usually walked” or “I used to walk,” but not both. Also, “back” should be “bike.” Add one specific reason or example to make the answer more developed.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I usually walked to school and to my friends’ houses because they were quite close to home. I’ve never really learned how to ride a bike.

建議: State your opinion clearly, then explain it with accurate grammar and a logical example. Use “because the city is very crowded,” not “because of the city is very clouded,” and say “prefer using cars to riding bikes.” Use “15- or 16-year-olds” and “driving cars,” rather than “fifteen, sixteen years old kids riding a car.” Be careful that the example is realistic and legally possible in your country.

範例: I’d say bikes aren’t very popular in my country because the cities are crowded and the roads can be unsafe for cyclists. Most people prefer driving because cars are more comfortable and convenient, especially for long journeys. However, cycling is becoming more popular among young people and fitness enthusiasts.

× Actually, no, I didn't when I was a kid, I usually walk a lot.

✓ Actually, no, I didn't. When I was a kid, I usually walked a lot.

The question asks about a past period, when I was a kid, so the verb should be in the simple past: walked, not walk. Also, the original sentence contains a comma splice, so it is clearer to separate the two independent clauses into two sentences.

× Cars are more popular in my country because of the city is very clouded.

✓ Cars are more popular in my country because the city is very crowded.

Because must be followed by a complete clause, such as the city is very crowded. Because of must be followed by a noun or noun phrase, such as the city's crowded conditions. Also, crowded is the correct adjective for a place with many people or vehicles.

× People prefer using cars than bikes.

✓ People prefer using cars to riding bikes.

The verb prefer is followed by to when comparing two choices: prefer A to B. The two activities should also be parallel, so using cars is matched with riding bikes.

× We could even see a fifteen, sixteen years old kids riding a car instead of a bike.

✓ We could even see fifteen- or sixteen-year-old kids driving cars instead of riding bikes.

The noun kids is plural, so it cannot be preceded by the singular article a. In a compound age adjective, year remains singular: fifteen-year-old. When referring to more than one child, use fifteen- or sixteen-year-old kids. The corrected sentence also uses plural cars and bikes to match the plural subject kids.

× We could even see a fifteen, sixteen years old kids riding a car instead of a bike.

✓ We could even see fifteen- or sixteen-year-old kids driving cars instead of riding bikes.

The age expression should be written as a compound adjective: fifteen- or sixteen-year-old. The natural verb for operating a car is driving, while riding is used for a bike. Hyphens make the age expression clear when it comes before the noun.