自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答基本涉及了父亲送自行车和练习骑车的内容，但表达不够自然，且语法错误较多。应先直接回答“Yes, I did”，再说明自行车是父亲送的，并解释你经常骑车的原因或结果。“a surprise gift for me in my childhood”应改为“a surprise gift when I was a child”；“as a daily present”不符合语境，可改为“as a birthday present”或“as a gift”；“I practice”应使用过去时“I practised”；“helped me behave me”意思不清，可以改为“helped me learn how to ride it”。建议使用2至4句，并用“After that”或“because”连接细节。

範例: Yes, I did. My father gave me a bike as a surprise gift when I was about eight years old. I practised riding it every day, and he helped me learn how to balance and control it. After a few weeks, I could ride around my neighbourhood by myself.

建議: 回答没有直接使用“Yes, I do”或“No, I don’t”回应问题，而且句子以“It is because”开头，结构不完整。“transportations”通常不可数，应使用“means of transport”或直接说“public transport”；“great transportations”搭配不自然。建议先表明自行车很受欢迎，再提供具体原因，例如自行车价格低、方便、环保，并举出通勤或上学的例子。可以使用“especially”或“for example”使信息更连贯；同时注意句末加句号。

範例: Yes, I do. Bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short journeys. Many people ride them to work or school, especially in crowded cities. They are also a greener alternative to cars and buses.

× Of course it's a surprise gift for me in my childhood.

✓ Of course, it was a surprise gift for me when I was a child.

题目询问的是童年时期的经历，因此应使用过去时。原句中的“it's”是现在时，应改为“was”。另外，“when I was a child”比“in my childhood”更自然。

× When I was a child my father gave me the bike one day as a daily present and I practice every day.

✓ When I was a child, my father gave me the bike one day as a present, and I practiced every day.

整段是在描述童年发生的事情，因此动词“practice”应使用过去式“practiced”。“daily present”搭配不自然，这里用“as a present”即可表达“作为礼物”。

× He always helped me behave me.

✓ He always helped me behave well.

“helped me”中的“me”已经是help的宾语；“behave”是不及物动词，后面不能再直接接“me”。如果想表达“表现得好”，应使用副词“well”，所以改为“helped me behave well”。

× It is because in my country many people ride bikes or take other great transportations for work or school.

✓ This is because, in my country, many people ride bikes or take other forms of transportation to work or school.

“transportation”通常是不可数名词，不能使用复数形式“transportations”。表达不同种类的交通方式时，应说“forms of transportation”。另外，“to work or school”比“for work or school”更自然地表示“去上班或上学”。