自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly in the past tense and use a more natural expression for your family's financial situation. “I don't have” should be “I didn't have,” and “our life is too poor” is unnatural; say “my family was not well-off” or “we couldn't afford one.” You could also add a brief specific detail explaining why you did not own a bike.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family was not well-off. We had to spend our money on more essential things, so a bicycle was not a priority.

建議: Your answer has a clear opinion and relevant supporting details, but several grammar and word-choice errors reduce its naturalness. Use “children receive bikes” and “birthday gifts,” and replace “aren't affordable” with “are affordable,” since affordability explains why bikes are popular. Also use “convenient for commuting” and “exercise,” and connect your ideas more smoothly with linking words such as “In addition” or “As a result.”

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. Many children receive bicycles as birthday gifts, and adults often use them for commuting. This is because bikes are relatively affordable and convenient for travelling short distances, as well as for getting some exercise.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child because our life is too poor.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because our life was too poor.

The question asks about a past period, so the verbs should be in the past tense. Change don't have to didn't have and is to was. The past-tense form keeps the answer consistent with when I was a child.

× Many children receives bikes as a birthday gifts and people often learn to ride one because bicycles aren't affordable and conveniently to commute short distances or exercises.

✓ Many children receive bikes as birthday gifts, and people often learn to ride them because bicycles are affordable and convenient for commuting short distances or exercising.

Children is a plural subject, so it must be followed by the plural verb receive, not the singular form receives. Also, the sentence has been adjusted to make the meaning and grammatical structure clear.

× Many children receives bikes as a birthday gifts and people often learn to ride one because bicycles aren't affordable and conveniently to commute short distances or exercises.

✓ Many children receive bikes as birthday gifts, and people often learn to ride them because bicycles are affordable and convenient for commuting short distances or exercising.

The plural noun bikes should be used with the plural phrase birthday gifts. The phrase a birthday gifts incorrectly combines the singular article a with the plural noun gifts. Use birthday gifts when referring to gifts in general.

× Many children receives bikes as a birthday gifts and people often learn to ride one because bicycles aren't affordable and conveniently to commute short distances or exercises.

✓ Many children receive bikes as birthday gifts, and people often learn to ride them because bicycles are affordable and convenient for commuting short distances or exercising.

The article a cannot be used before the plural noun gifts. Remove a and use birthday gifts, or use a birthday gift if referring to one gift.

× Many children receives bikes as a birthday gifts and people often learn to ride one because bicycles aren't affordable and conveniently to commute short distances or exercises.

✓ Many children receive bikes as birthday gifts, and people often learn to ride them because bicycles are affordable and convenient for commuting short distances or exercising.

Conveniently is an adverb, but the sentence needs an adjective to describe bicycles. Use convenient because the correct structure is bicycles are convenient.

× Many children receives bikes as a birthday gifts and people often learn to ride one because bicycles aren't affordable and conveniently to commute short distances or exercises.

✓ Many children receive bikes as birthday gifts, and people often learn to ride them because bicycles are affordable and convenient for commuting short distances or exercising.

After the preposition for, use the -ing form of the verb. Therefore, use commuting and exercising, not commute and exercises. The two activities should also have parallel forms.