自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear, relevant, and well developed, with a specific detail about receiving the bike and an emotional reaction. However, use the past tense consistently: change “spend” to “spent.” Also, say “riding it around the neighbourhood” or “around my neighbourhood” rather than “around a neighbourhood.”

範例: Yes, I had a pink bike when I was in primary school. My parents gave it to me as a reward for getting good grades, and I spent many afternoons riding it around my neighbourhood with my friends. I still remember feeling free and happy whenever I rode it.

建議: You give a direct answer and include relevant reasons, but the final part is unclear and contains repetition and grammatical errors. Remove the repeated word “travel” and replace “happy to use conditions and air pollution” with a complete idea, such as “they help reduce air pollution.” Use a linking phrase such as “In addition” to connect the supporting reasons naturally.

範例: Yes, I would say bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children who often ride them to school. In addition, many people use bikes for short-distance trips because they are convenient and environmentally friendly. They also help reduce traffic congestion and air pollution.

× My parents gave it to me as a reward for getting good grades and I spend many afternoons riding it around a neighbourhood with my friends.

✓ My parents gave it to me as a reward for getting good grades, and I spent many afternoons riding it around the neighbourhood with my friends.

The question asks about a past period when you were a child, so the verb spend should be in the simple past tense: spent. The article the is also more natural before neighbourhood when referring to a particular neighbourhood in the context.

× They are also commonly used for short distance travel travel because they are convenient and environmentally friendly, happy to use conditions and air pollution.

✓ They are also commonly used for short-distance travel because they are convenient and environmentally friendly, helping to reduce traffic congestion and air pollution.

The original sentence has a repeated word, travel travel, and the phrase happy to use conditions and air pollution is not grammatically or semantically complete. The phrase helping to reduce creates a logical connection between environmentally friendly bikes and their positive effects. Use short-distance as a compound adjective before travel, and make sure the final phrase contains a clear verb and meaning.