自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly and use the correct past-tense form: “Yes, I did have,” not “I did had.” Use more natural expressions such as “ride a bike indoors” and “a three-wheeled bike” instead of “was riding in my house” and “was only with three wheels.” Avoid repeating “bike” and connect the details more smoothly. Although the answer provides specific information about your age, parents, and the bike, it would be clearer with a simple topic sentence followed by supporting details.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small, three-wheeled bike when I was about three years old. My parents bought it for me, and I used to ride it around the house because I was too young to ride outside.

建議: Give a clear answer first, then explain it with two well-organized examples. Correct “go on a bike to the school” to “cycle to school” or “ride their bikes to school,” and replace “go on the cycling” with “go cycling.” The sentence about adults needs a complete structure, such as “Many adults also go cycling in the morning to keep fit.” Avoid the redundant ending “and yes it is,” and use a linking word such as “Furthermore” or “For example” to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many students ride their bikes to school because it is convenient and inexpensive. Furthermore, many adults go cycling in the morning to keep fit, especially in parks and residential areas.

× Yes, I did had a bike when I was three years old.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was three years old.

After the auxiliary did, the main verb must be in its base form. Therefore, had must change to have. Do not use the past-tense form after did.

× It was a toy bike which was only with three wheels.

✓ It was a toy bike with only three wheels.

The phrase was with three wheels is unnatural in this context. Use with only three wheels to describe the bike's feature. This sentence can also be made more concise by removing which was.

× Yes, I guess bikes are popular in my country because the students go on a bike to the school.

✓ Yes, I guess bikes are popular in my country because students ride bikes to school.

The natural verb phrase is ride bikes, not go on a bike, when describing regular transportation. Also, school is normally used without the in the general expression go to school. Avoid the unnecessary article when referring to school as an institution.

× Even the adults go on the cycling in the morning is a part of a fitness and yes it is.

✓ Even adults go cycling in the morning as part of their fitness routine.

The original sentence incorrectly combines two clauses: adults go cycling and cycling is a part of fitness. The verb phrase go cycling is complete by itself, so the extra is a part of a fitness creates an incorrect sentence structure. The revised sentence uses as part of their fitness routine to express the intended relationship clearly.

× Even the adults go on the cycling in the morning is a part of a fitness and yes it is.

✓ Even adults go cycling in the morning as part of their fitness routine.

Use go cycling, not go on the cycling. Cycling is used here as an activity after go, without the preposition on or the article the.

× Even the adults go on the cycling in the morning is a part of a fitness and yes it is.

✓ Even adults go cycling in the morning as part of their fitness routine.

When speaking about adults in general, do not use the before adults. Also, fitness is generally uncountable in this meaning, so a fitness is incorrect. Fitness routine is a natural countable expression.