自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Start with a direct answer: “No, I didn’t.” Avoid fillers and incorrect phrases such as “People I thought that” and “My butter.” Use “for safety reasons” instead of repeating “security” and “safety issues.” Also, say “ride around my neighborhood,” not “for riding my neighborhood.” Add one clear detail explaining why your father bought you a scooter.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents were worried about my safety. Instead, my father bought me a scooter, which I used to ride around my neighborhood. It was a fun and convenient way to get around.

建議: Give a complete topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Correct the grammar in “because of it is” and “at a very small installments”; use “because they are convenient and affordable” and “on small installments.” Avoid repetition and finish the final idea clearly, for example by explaining that bikes help people avoid traffic jams. Include one specific group of users or situation to make the answer more developed.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. Many people can buy them on small installment plans, so they are accessible to most families. They are also useful in crowded cities because cyclists can avoid traffic jams and reach nearby places quickly.

× People I thought that no, when I was a child, I did not have any bike because of security, because of safety issues.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because of safety issues.

The original sentence has an incorrect word order and an unnecessary phrase, People I thought that no. A clear answer should begin with No, I did not. The sentence also needs a complete and natural structure.

× People I thought that no, when I was a child, I did not have any bike because of security, because of safety issues.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because of safety issues.

The singular countable noun bike normally requires an article. Use a bike when referring to one nonspecific bike.

× My butter my father bought me a scooter for riding my neighborhood.

✓ But my father bought me a scooter to ride around my neighborhood.

Butter is not the correct conjunction here; it should be But. But introduces a contrast with the previous statement.

× My butter my father bought me a scooter for riding my neighborhood.

✓ But my father bought me a scooter to ride around my neighborhood.

The phrase riding my neighborhood uses the wrong preposition because people ride around or in a neighborhood, not the neighborhood itself. Around is suitable for expressing movement within the area.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because of it is very convenient and cheap.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are very convenient and cheap.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to the plural noun bikes. Use the plural pronoun they and the plural verb are. Also, because should introduce the clause they are very convenient and cheap.

× It every everyone, everyone can buy it buy it at a very small installments.

✓ Everyone can buy a bike in small installments.

The original sentence contains repeated words and does not have a clear grammatical structure. Use one subject, everyone, followed by the verb can buy and the object a bike.

× It every everyone, everyone can buy it buy it at a very small installments.

✓ Everyone can buy a bike in small installments.

Installments is plural, so it cannot be preceded by the singular article a. Use small installments without a, or use a small installment if you mean only one payment.

× It every everyone, everyone can buy it buy it at a very small installments.

✓ Everyone can buy a bike in small installments.

The preposition in is used with the expression pay or buy something in installments. At a very small installments is not grammatically correct.

× It is very convenient for traffic because when when they when.

✓ Bikes are very convenient in traffic because they help people avoid traffic jams.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains repeated words. It needs a clear subject, verb, and complete explanation. The corrected sentence expresses a complete reason.

× It is very convenient for traffic because when when they when.

✓ Bikes are very convenient in traffic because they help people avoid traffic jams.

In traffic is the natural prepositional phrase for describing transportation conditions. For traffic does not express this meaning correctly.