自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer more naturally by saying “Yes, I did” and then explaining how you used the bike. The phrase “I used to use” is repetitive, and “use for commuting” is grammatically incomplete because it needs an object such as “it.” Add punctuation or a linking word to separate the ideas, and use more natural vocabulary such as “ride my bike” and “cycle home from school.”

範例: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike to and from school because it was convenient and gave me some exercise.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Avoid unnecessary words like “I do think” and “yeah,” and use “bikes” or “them” instead of “the bikes” and “this.” The answer contains a long, repetitive sentence, so divide it into two sentences and use a linking word such as “especially” or “for example.” Be more specific by mentioning who uses bikes and why they are popular.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among schoolchildren. For example, many students cycle to school because it is affordable, convenient, and a good way to avoid traffic.

× Yes I did have a bike when I was a child I used to use for commuting from my school to my home

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I used to use it for commuting from my school to my home.

The verb use needs an object. The pronoun it refers to the bike, so it must be included after use. Also, a full stop separates the two complete sentences clearly.

× Yes, I do think the bikes are popular in my country because a lot of children use this for commuting from home and between home and school and yeah it is most common among the students

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because a lot of children use them for commuting between home and school, and they are most common among students.

Bikes is plural, so this and it cannot refer to it. Use them as the object of use and they as the subject of are. Using the correct pronoun number makes the references clear.

× Yes, I do think the bikes are popular in my country because a lot of children use this for commuting from home and between home and school and yeah it is most common among the students

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because a lot of children use them for commuting between home and school, and they are most common among students.

When speaking about bikes and students in general, no definite article is needed. The bikes and the students suggest specific bikes and specific students, whereas bikes and students describe people or things generally.

× Yes, I do think the bikes are popular in my country because a lot of children use this for commuting from home and between home and school and yeah it is most common among the students

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because a lot of children use them for commuting between home and school, and they are most common among students.

From home and between home and school combines two incompatible structures. Use between home and school to describe movement from one place to another. Also, avoid repeatedly joining ideas with and; use a comma and a suitable conjunction to make the sentence clearer.