自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer responds directly and gives a reason, but the ending contains several self-corrections and grammatical errors. Say “my father” and “he bought me” clearly instead of repeating or changing words. Also, “bike” and “cycle” have the same meaning, so avoid unnecessary repetition. Use a simple structure: answer the question first, explain why, and then add one specific detail about the alternative your father bought.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bicycle when I was a child because my father didn’t allow me to ride one. Instead, he bought me a small scooter, which I used to play with near my home.

建議: You give a clear opinion and relevant reasons, but there are several grammar, repetition, and word-choice problems. Use “they are inexpensive” instead of repeating “bikes are not very expensive” and correct “everyone buy it” to “everyone can afford them” or “many people buy them.” The phrase “congestion roads” is unnatural; say “congested roads” or explain that bikes help people avoid traffic congestion. End with a complete sentence rather than “So it is.”

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. They are especially useful in big cities, where people can use them to avoid traffic congestion. In addition, cycling is a cheap and healthy way to travel.

× When I was a child I had no bike at all because my father did not allow me to ride a bike, so she so he gave me bought me a cycle.

✓ When I was a child, I had no bike at all because my father did not allow me to ride a bike, so he bought me a bicycle.

The original sentence contains repeated and incorrectly arranged verbs: gave me bought me. Use one correctly structured verb phrase, he bought me a bicycle. A comma after the introductory clause also improves the sentence structure.

× so she so he gave me bought me a cycle

✓ so he bought me a bicycle

The subject is my father, so the correct pronoun is he, not she. The repeated pronouns and verbs should be removed.

× It is very cheap, everyone buy it and it is very convenient for for congestion, congestion roads.

✓ They are very cheap, everyone buys them, and they are very convenient on congested roads.

Bikes is plural, so use the plural pronoun they and the plural form are. The object pronoun should also be them rather than it because it refers to bikes.

× everyone buy it

✓ everyone buys them

Everyone is grammatically singular, so the verb in the present tense must be buys. Because everyone refers to bikes, use the plural object pronoun them instead of it.

× it is very convenient for for congestion, congestion roads

✓ they are very convenient on congested roads

The repeated preposition for is incorrect here. Use on to describe riding or traveling on roads. The natural expression is on congested roads.

× congestion roads

✓ congested roads

Congestion is a noun, but a word is needed to describe the roads. Use the adjective congested, meaning crowded with traffic.

× So it is.

✓ So they are very convenient on congested roads.

So it is is incomplete in this context and does not clearly express the intended meaning. The sentence should include a complete verb phrase and maintain agreement with the plural subject bikes.