自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ соответствует вопросу и содержит личную деталь, но в нём много грамматических и лексических ошибок. Лучше сказать “a present from my parents” вместо “the present of my parents”, “on my third birthday” вместо “for my 3rd anniversary”, а также “a pink tricycle with a picture of a pretty girl” вместо “a third wheels pink bike with a pretty girl thinks”. Начните с чёткого основного ответа, затем добавьте одну-две конкретные детали; избегайте повторов “uh” и не перегружайте предложение.

範例: Yes, I did. My first bike was a present from my parents for my third birthday. It was a small pink tricycle with a picture of a pretty girl on it, and I loved riding it around our yard.

建議: Идея понятна, но ответ обрывается и содержит много ошибок в согласовании и структуре. Используйте “I think they are” или “Yes, definitely”, “everyone I know has a bike or had one as a child”, “when they were children” и “Russia has a strong sports culture”. Добавьте связный пример или причину и завершите мысль, например объясните, что взрослые используют велосипеды для спорта и отдыха. Старайтесь не повторять “so” и “um”.

範例: Yes, definitely. Almost everyone I know has a bike or had one when they were a child. Bikes are especially popular in Russia because many adults use them for exercise, leisure, and outdoor activities.

× Of course, as a lot of other kids, my first bike was the present of my parents for me for my 3rd anniversary and it was a uh, third wheels pink bike with a pretty girl thinks.

✓ Of course, like many other kids, my first bike was a present from my parents for my third anniversary, and it was a three-wheeled pink bike with pretty-girl things.

Use like, not as, when making a comparison with other children. Use from to show who gave the present. The preposition for is appropriate before an occasion such as an anniversary.

× Of course, as a lot of other kids, my first bike was the present of my parents for me for my 3rd anniversary and it was a uh, third wheels pink bike with a pretty girl thinks.

✓ Of course, like many other kids, my first bike was a present from my parents for my third anniversary, and it was a three-wheeled pink bike with pretty-girl things.

The compound adjective must be three-wheeled, not third wheels. Three describes the number of wheels, and wheeled is used as part of the adjective. The noun things is plural because it refers to more than one design or decoration.

× I think yes, absolutely every person I know have a bike or had a bike when uh, they was a there was a kids.

✓ I think so. Absolutely, every person I know has a bike or had one when they were a child.

Every person is grammatically singular, so the present-tense verb must be has, not have. Remember that singular subjects such as every person, everyone, and each person take a singular verb.

× I think yes, absolutely every person I know have a bike or had a bike when uh, they was a there was a kids.

✓ I think so. Absolutely, every person I know has a bike or had one when they were a child.

The past form of be used with they is were, not was. Use they were when referring to people in the past.

× I think yes, absolutely every person I know have a bike or had a bike when uh, they was a there was a kids.

✓ I think so. Absolutely, every person I know has a bike or had one when they were a child.

There was is unnecessary and incorrectly inserted into the clause. The intended meaning is that people owned bikes when they were children, so the clause should simply be when they were a child.

× I think yes, absolutely every person I know have a bike or had a bike when uh, they was a there was a kids.

✓ I think so. Absolutely, every person I know has a bike or had one when they were children.

The article a must be followed by a singular noun, so a kids is incorrect. You can say a child or use the plural form children without a.

× So also in Russia, strong sport culture, so umm, a lot of adult people, umm have bikes and.

✓ Also, Russia has a strong sports culture, so many adults have bikes.

The original phrase Russia, strong sport culture has no main verb. Add has to form a complete clause: Russia has a strong sports culture.

× So also in Russia, strong sport culture, so umm, a lot of adult people, umm have bikes and.

✓ Also, Russia has a strong sports culture, so many adults have bikes.

A singular countable noun phrase such as strong sports culture needs an article. Use a strong sports culture because the culture is being mentioned as one type of culture.