自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear, direct, and well developed. You use a logical sequence with “at the beginning” and “then,” and you include specific details about the training wheels and where you rode. To sound more natural, say “near our house” instead of “just next to our house,” and avoid repeating “bike” when it is not necessary. You could also add a brief feeling or result to make the answer more engaging, while keeping it within three or four sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It had training wheels at first, but my parents removed them once I learned how to balance. I often rode it with my friends near our house in the mountains, and it was one of my favorite ways to spend time outdoors.

建議: You answer the question directly, but the response contains several grammatical and naturalness problems. Use “in the mountains” or “during holidays in mountainous areas,” not “in the mountain.” Remove the repeated “to” in “to to get,” and replace “a type of working out to maintain a good health” with “a form of exercise that helps them stay healthy.” The second sentence is too long and includes too many ideas connected with “and” and “maybe”; divide it into two or three shorter sentences and use linking words such as “Additionally” or “As a result.”

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially during holidays in mountainous areas. Many children and teenagers ride them around their neighborhoods, either to visit nearby shops or simply to have fun. Cycling is also a convenient form of exercise, so it helps them stay active and healthy.

× Bikes are pretty common in my country, especially when we have vacations in the mountain.

✓ Bikes are pretty common in my country, especially when we have vacations in the mountains.

The phrase refers to mountains in general, so the plural form mountains is more appropriate than the singular form mountain.

× All the kids and teenagers use them in the neighborhood to to get to the grocery shops and to enjoy their time and maybe they consider it a type of working out to maintain a good health also.

✓ All the kids and teenagers use them in the neighborhood to get to the grocery shops, enjoy themselves, and perhaps exercise to maintain good health.

The infinitive marker to is repeated in to to get. Removing the duplicate creates a grammatically correct structure. The revised sentence also uses parallel verb forms: get, enjoy, and exercise.

× All the kids and teenagers use them in the neighborhood to to get to the grocery shops and to enjoy their time and maybe they consider it a type of working out to maintain a good health also.

✓ All the kids and teenagers use them in the neighborhood to get to the grocery shops, enjoy themselves, and perhaps exercise to maintain good health.

Health is generally an uncountable noun when referring to a person's overall condition, so it does not normally take the article a. Say maintain good health, not maintain a good health.