自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly at the beginning instead of saying “I would say I would.” Use the past simple accurately: “I didn’t have” and “we had,” not “I did not had” or “we do had.” Avoid repeating the fact that you did not own a personal bike. You could organize the answer with a clear contrast, such as “Although I didn’t have my own bike, my family had one.” Add one specific detail about how you used your father’s bike to make the answer more natural and complete. Keep the answer to three or four sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike of my own when I was a child. However, my family had one, which belonged to my father and was bought with his first salary. I sometimes used it to ride around my neighborhood with my friends, so I still have fond memories of cycling.

建議: Start with a complete topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Explain the reasons using linking words like “mainly because” and “in addition.” The current answer contains an unfinished idea and the phrase “men oriented machines” is unclear and not relevantly explained; avoid making a broad claim about a patriarchal society unless you can clearly connect it to bike ownership. Give specific support, such as affordable prices, manufacturers, commuting, exercise, or traffic congestion. Use shorter sentences and finish your answer clearly.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, mainly because there are many local manufacturers and affordable models available. In addition, cycling is a convenient way to travel through busy cities and it is also becoming popular as a form of exercise. Many young people use bikes to commute or ride with friends at the weekend.

× Uh, I would say I would.

✓ Uh, I would say I did.

The question asks about a past experience, so the answer should use the past-tense auxiliary did. Here, did refers to having a bike as a child.

× I did not had a personal bike for myself.

✓ I did not have a personal bike.

After the auxiliary did or did not, the main verb must be in its base form. Therefore, had should be changed to have. The phrase for myself is unnecessary because a personal bike already expresses this meaning.

× However I as a family, we do had a bike.

✓ However, as a family, we did have a bike.

Because the answer refers to the speaker's childhood, the past-tense form did have is required. After did, the verb must be in its base form, have, not had.

× My father owned, uh, his first bike from his first salary.

✓ My father bought his first bike with his first salary.

With is the appropriate preposition when describing the money used to buy something. From his first salary is not the natural prepositional phrase in this context.

× So yeah, I do had an experience of having a bike during my childhood.

✓ So yeah, I did have experience riding a bike during my childhood.

The answer describes a past experience, so did have should be used. After did, the verb must be in its base form, have. Experience riding a bike is also the more natural expression.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country and the major reason behind it we do have a lot of manufacturers and good companies that offer really excellent bikes and since my country is more men oriented or patriarchal I would say having men oriented machines or vehicles

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, and the major reason is that we have many manufacturers and companies that offer excellent bikes. Since my country is more male-oriented, or patriarchal, I would say that men-oriented machines and vehicles are also popular.

The original response contains several ideas joined together without the necessary linking words and punctuation. The phrase the major reason behind it we do have is incomplete; it should be structured as the major reason is that we have. The final part also needs a subject and a verb to form a complete sentence.

× The major reason behind it we do have a lot of manufacturers and good companies that offer really excellent bikes.

✓ The major reason is that we have many manufacturers and companies that offer excellent bikes.

The present tense is appropriate because the speaker is describing a current situation. However, the original sentence incorrectly places we do have after the noun phrase the major reason. The clause should be introduced with is that.

× Since my country is more men oriented or patriarchal I would say having men oriented machines or vehicles.

✓ Since my country is more male-oriented, or patriarchal, I would say that men-oriented machines and vehicles are popular.

Male-oriented and men-oriented should be written as compound adjectives with hyphens. Male-oriented is the more natural adjective for describing a society, while men-oriented can describe products or machines intended for men.