自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 질문에 직접 답하려면 과거 시제를 사용해 “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child”라고 말해야 합니다. “I’m child”는 문법적으로 잘못된 표현이므로 “when I was a child”로 수정하세요. 또한 자전거를 얼마나 자주 탔는지와 어디에서 탔는지 같은 구체적인 세부 정보를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이면 답변이 더 자연스럽고 효과적입니다.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day, especially around my neighborhood. It was a great way to have fun and get some exercise.

建議: “Yes”로 시작한 뒤 바로 핵심 의견을 완전한 문장으로 말하세요. “I live in Taejon”과 “many people like bikes”를 연결하고, “Sue,” “umm,” “la” 같은 불필요한 머뭇거림과 도시 이름의 반복은 줄이는 것이 좋습니다. 자전거가 인기 있는 이유로 자전거 도로, 운동, 친환경 교통수단 등을 구체적으로 설명하면 답변의 내용과 연결성이 향상됩니다.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities like Daejeon. Many people ride them for exercise and short trips because there are several bike paths. They are also an eco-friendly alternative to driving.

× Yes, I'm child many everyday bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about the past, so use the past-tense verb had instead of the present-tense form am. The phrase I'm child is incorrect; use when I was a child. The correction also uses a before the singular countable noun bike.

× Yes, I'm child many everyday bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

A singular countable noun needs an article. Use a bike and a child, not bike and child without articles.

× Yes, I'm child many everyday bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence does not have a clear grammatical structure. Use a complete clause with a subject and verb: I had a bike. Then add the time expression when I was a child.

× Yes, Sue umm I la live in Taejon, Taejon umm, many people like the bike.

✓ Yes, I live in Taejon, and many people like bikes.

When speaking about bikes in general, use the plural noun bikes. The singular form the bike refers to one specific bike, which is not the intended meaning.

× Yes, Sue umm I la live in Taejon, Taejon umm, many people like the bike.

✓ Yes, I live in Taejon, and many people like bikes.

Use the conjunction and to connect the two related ideas: I live in Taejon and many people like bikes. The filler words do not connect the clauses grammatically.

× Yes, Sue umm I la live in Taejon, Taejon umm, many people like the bike.

✓ Yes, I live in Taejon, and many people like bikes.

The article the is unnecessary because the sentence refers to bikes in general, not to one specific bike. Use the plural noun bikes without an article.

× Yes, Sue umm I la live in Taejon, Taejon umm, many people like the bike.

✓ Yes, I live in Taejon, and many people like bikes.

The original sentence contains interruptions and two clauses without a clear connection. Remove the unnecessary fillers and connect the clauses with and.