自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly, then give a clear and natural explanation. Replace the awkward phrase “over the course of 14 to 15 years” with “from the age of... until...”. Also, avoid unnecessary fillers such as “uh” and “umm”, and clarify that you switched from a bicycle to a motorcycle when you became older.

範例: Yes, I did. I had several bicycles from the age of five until I was about fifteen. I stopped riding a bicycle when I got older because I began using a motorcycle to travel longer distances.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence by saying whether bicycles are popular in India. Correct unclear expressions such as “white bikes,” “mechanical bicycle,” and “gas bicycle motorbike”; use “regular bicycles,” “electric bikes,” and “motorcycles” instead. Organize the reasons with linking words, and provide more specific support, such as the lower cost of bicycles and the difficulty of parking or storing cars. Avoid saying “everybody,” which is an overgeneralization.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in India, especially in smaller towns and among students. Cars are still expensive for many families, so people often choose regular bicycles, electric bikes, or motorcycles instead. In addition, bicycles are affordable, easy to store, and convenient for short journeys.

× And yeah, it's very convenient. It's easy to store, costs much less.

✓ And yeah, they are very convenient. They are easy to store and cost much less.

The noun being described is plural, referring to bicycles or bikes, so the plural pronoun they is more appropriate than it. The verbs also need to agree with they: are and cost, not is and costs.

× And yeah, it's very convenient. It's easy to store, costs much less.

✓ And yeah, they are very convenient. They are easy to store and cost much less.

The two predicates easy to store and cost much less should be joined with the coordinating conjunction and. Without and, the sentence is not properly connected. Use and to link two descriptions of the same subject.