自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly in the past tense: say that you did not have a bike as a child. Then explain when and why you learned to ride one. Avoid repetition, unfinished clauses, and incorrect forms such as “I don’t have” and “if I will go walk.” Use linking words such as “however,” “because,” and “therefore,” and limit your response to two or three clear sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I learned to ride one as an adult because I needed it to commute to work. Cycling was faster than walking, so it helped me arrive at work on time.

建議: Give a complete answer and finish your main idea. Use “many people” instead of “a lot of people of us,” and use “bikes” or “them” consistently rather than “it.” Explain at least two specific reasons, such as commuting, exercise, avoiding traffic, or protecting the environment. Use a linking word such as “also” or “for example” to connect the details.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them for commuting and exercise, while others ride them to avoid traffic during rush hour. For example, students often cycle to school because it is inexpensive and convenient.

× I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to the past, so the past-tense auxiliary did is needed. After did, use the base form have, not had.

× During in my adult time

✓ During my adulthood

Do not use in after during. Also, adulthood is the natural noun for the period when a person is an adult.

× Because my work is is have to be transported using a picycle

✓ Because I had to use a bicycle to get to work

The original clause has an incorrect verb structure: is is have to be transported. Use the clear structure subject + had to + base verb. Bicycle is also the correct spelling.

× If I will go walk, I'm will be behind of my coworker.

✓ If I walked, I would be behind my coworkers.

In a second conditional sentence, use the past form in the if-clause and would in the result clause. Do not use will after if in this type of hypothetical sentence. The phrase go walk is also replaced by the simpler verb walked.

× If I will go walk, I'm will be behind of my coworker.

✓ If I walked, I would be behind my coworkers.

Behind is not followed by of. Say behind my coworkers. The plural form coworkers is appropriate when comparing yourself with the people you work with in general.

× A lot of people of us are they're using it for transportation.

✓ A lot of people in my country use bikes for transportation.

Use in to describe people who belong to or live in a country. The phrase people of us is incorrect in this context. The corrected sentence also clearly identifies the people being discussed.

× A lot of people of us are they're using it for transportation.

✓ A lot of people in my country use bikes for transportation.

The original sentence contains the unnecessary combination are they are using. For a general fact about regular transportation habits, use the simple present: use.

× For transportation and for leisures

✓ For transportation and leisure

Leisure is generally an uncountable noun when it means free-time activities, so it does not normally take the plural ending s in this sentence.

× Sometimes for they are they are using it to avoid

✓ Sometimes they use them to avoid traffic.

They are they are is an incorrect repetition of the subject and auxiliary. Use they use for a general habit. Since bikes is plural, use the pronoun them instead of it.

× And sometimes for they are they are using it to avoid

✓ They also sometimes use bikes to avoid traffic.

The original clause is incomplete because avoid normally needs an object or complement in this context. The corrected sentence has a complete subject, verb, object, and purpose phrase. It also avoids the repeated words they are.