自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly, then add one specific detail about how you used your bicycle. Improve the grammar by saying “I used to ride it” instead of “I used to take it everywhere I went along to play,” and “I remember taking it” instead of “I remember it taking it.” Use a linking word such as “For example” to introduce the park detail. Avoid repeating “it” unnecessarily.

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child, and I used to ride it whenever I went out to play. For example, I often cycled to the park after dinner to meet my friends.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with two concise reasons or a personal example. Avoid redundancy because “economical” and “affordable” have similar meanings; instead, mention that bikes are cheap to buy and run. Replace “every second person” with the more natural “many people” unless you have reliable statistics. Use “when” or “and I convinced him” instead of “where,” and keep the tense consistent: “I wanted to buy a bike instead of a car.”

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive to buy and cheap to run. Many people use them for short journeys, especially in crowded cities. In fact, I once convinced my father to let me buy a bike instead of a car because it was more practical for me.

× Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child and I used to take it everywhere I went along to play.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child, and I used to take it everywhere I went to play.

The phrase went along to play is incorrectly structured in this context. Use went to play because to play expresses the purpose of going. A comma before and also helps separate the two independent clauses.

× I remember it taking it to the park to meet my friends every day after dinner.

✓ I remember taking it to the park to meet my friends every day after dinner.

After remember, use a gerund phrase when referring to a remembered past activity: remember taking. The pronoun it cannot be the subject of taking here because the speaker is the person who took the bicycle.

× I remember talking to my father about it where I convinced him that instead of a car I would like to buy a bike for myself.

✓ I remember talking to my father about it, and I convinced him that I would like to buy a bike instead of a car.

Where refers to a place, so it cannot connect these two ideas. Use and to join the two actions. The phrase instead of a car is placed before the object it contrasts with, making the sentence clearer and more natural.