自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating contrasting words such as “but” and “so.” The phrase “I did not have bike” should be “I did not have a bike,” and the explanation about it being illegal is unclear and seems unrelated. Use a simple reason and add one specific detail about how you travelled or what you used instead. Keep the answer to two or three clear sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child, although my parents owned one. I usually walked to school or played with other toys because cycling was not very common in my neighbourhood.

建議: Begin with a clear answer such as “Yes, they are quite popular.” Avoid starting with “Also” when there is no previous idea to connect to. Improve the grammar by using “younger generations” and “in the mountains,” and do not repeat “quite popular.” Organise the supporting details into a reason and an example, using a linking word such as “especially” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among younger people and outdoor enthusiasts. Many people use them to explore the mountains or go on long-distance road trips. For example, cycling groups often organise weekend rides in the countryside.

× No, I did not have bike but my parents did so but I did have bicycles and other things because like if I am talking about a bike it's not legal to have it.

✓ No, I did not have a bike, but my parents did. I had bicycles and other things, too, because having a bike was not legal.

The singular countable noun bike requires the indefinite article a. We say have a bike, not have bike.

× No, I did not have bike but my parents did so but I did have bicycles and other things because like if I am talking about a bike it's not legal to have it.

✓ No, I did not have a bike, but my parents did. I had bicycles and other things, too, because having a bike was not legal.

The original sentence uses several conjunctions together unnecessarily, including but, so, but, because, and like. Use one clear conjunction for each relationship between ideas, or divide the ideas into separate sentences.

× No, I did not have bike but my parents did so but I did have bicycles and other things because like if I am talking about a bike it's not legal to have it.

✓ No, I did not have a bike, but my parents did. I had bicycles and other things, too, because having a bike was not legal.

The original response is a long run-on sentence with unclear connections between ideas. Divide it into complete sentences and use a clear subject and verb in each sentence.

× Also, bikes are quite popular among the young generations and people who like to travel and explore a lot, especially among the mountains or or for road trips, they are quite popular.

✓ Bikes are also quite popular among younger generations and people who like to travel and explore, especially in the mountains or on road trips.

Use in with areas such as the mountains and on with activities or routes such as road trips. The preposition among is not suitable in these two contexts.

× Also, bikes are quite popular among the young generations and people who like to travel and explore a lot, especially among the mountains or or for road trips, they are quite popular.

✓ Bikes are also quite popular among younger generations and people who like to travel and explore, especially in the mountains or on road trips.

The word or is repeated unnecessarily. Use or only once to connect the two alternatives: in the mountains or on road trips.

× Also, bikes are quite popular among the young generations and people who like to travel and explore a lot, especially among the mountains or or for road trips, they are quite popular.

✓ Bikes are also quite popular among younger generations and people who like to travel and explore, especially in the mountains or on road trips.

The original sentence contains a comma splice and repeats the main idea twice. Use one complete sentence with a clear subject, verb, and logical sentence structure.