自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly in the past tense: say “I didn’t have a bike.” Avoid restarting the sentence and repeating “I had my own doll.” Use a clear reason and one specific supporting detail. The phrase “in a childhood” is unnatural; say “during my childhood” instead. You could also say “a doll that my mother gave me for my birthday” rather than “which was gifted by my mother.”

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I wasn’t very interested in outdoor toys because I preferred playing with dolls at home. In fact, my mother gave me a doll for my birthday, and it was my favorite toy.

建議: Your answer has a clear opinion, but the second sentence is repetitive and the examples are unclear. Avoid repeating “popular in our country”; instead, explain who uses bikes and why. Use accurate names and categories, such as motorcycles, mountain bikes, or commuter bikes, if that is what you mean. Add a linking phrase such as “For example” and give one specific reason, such as affordability or convenience.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people and commuters. For example, many people use motorcycles because they are affordable and can get through heavy traffic. Bicycles are also common in rural areas and among people who enjoy exercising.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The question refers to a period in the past, so the past-tense auxiliary did not is required. Use didn't have, not don't have, to talk about past possession.

× I'm not I was not interested in outdoor toys in a childhood I had my own doll, I had my own doll which was gifted by my mother on my birthday.

✓ I was not interested in outdoor toys during my childhood. I had my own doll, which was gifted by my mother on my birthday.

The phrase I'm not I was not contains an incomplete and repeated structure. The original also joins two complete ideas without proper punctuation. Use the complete sentence I was not interested and separate the ideas with a full stop.

× I was not interested in outdoor toys in a childhood.

✓ I was not interested in outdoor toys during my childhood.

During is the appropriate preposition for referring to a period of time. The phrase in a childhood is not natural because childhood is a specific period in the speaker's life; use during my childhood instead.

× I was not interested in outdoor toys in a childhood.

✓ I was not interested in outdoor toys during my childhood.

A childhood is incorrect in this context because the speaker is referring to their own specific childhood. Use the possessive determiner my before childhood.