自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and use consistent past tense. Replace “I've got” with “got,” “the extra ones” with “training wheels,” and “keep balance” with “keep my balance.” Avoid ending with “That’s it,” as it sounds slightly abrupt. You can make the answer more natural by briefly describing how you felt or mentioning who taught you.

範例: Yes, I got my first bike when I was about six. I learned to ride without training wheels, and my father taught me to go straight and keep my balance. I made a few mistakes at first, but I really enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood.

建議: Give a complete answer with a clear main idea and avoid repeating “because.” Use “buses and the subway” instead of “bus and subway,” and say “designated bike lanes” rather than “designated roads for bikes.” Explain the contrast logically with a linking word such as “However,” and finish the sentence instead of ending with “and.” A specific comparison between cities or types of commuters would make the answer more developed.

範例: Bikes are fairly popular in my country, but they are not as common as they are in many European countries. In large cities, most people prefer buses and the subway because they are convenient and affordable. However, cycling is becoming more popular as some cities are building designated bike lanes and promoting it as a healthy form of transport.

× Yes, I've actually got my first bike when I was around six years old.

✓ Yes, I actually got my first bike when I was around six years old.

The event happened at a specific time in the past, so use the simple past got instead of the present perfect form I've got. With a finished past-time expression such as when I was around six years old, the simple past is required.

× I already started riding on two wheels without the extra ones.

✓ I had already started riding on two wheels without the extra ones.

The action of starting to ride happened before another past event in the story. The past perfect had already started clearly shows that this action occurred earlier.

× My father just told me that I need to go straight.

✓ My father just told me that I needed to go straight.

After a past reporting verb such as told, the verb in indirect speech is normally shifted back from need to needed. This keeps the reported statement consistent with the past context.

× They're not as popular as in Europe.

✓ They're not as popular as bikes are in Europe.

In an as...as comparison, the comparison object must be clear. The phrase as in Europe is incomplete because it does not explicitly state what is being compared. Adding bikes are makes the comparison complete.

× People tend to use public transport as bus and subway.

✓ People tend to use public transport such as buses and subways.

Buses and subways refer to types of public transportation in general, so plural nouns are more appropriate. The plural forms also match the general meaning of the sentence.

× We don't have that designated roads for bikes.

✓ We don't have those designated roads for bikes.

The demonstrative determiner must agree with the plural noun roads. Use those with plural nouns, not that, which is used with a singular noun.

× Yes, but I guess they're not as popular as in Europe, because in our country people tend to use public transport as bus and subway because we don't have that designated roads for bikes and

✓ Yes, but I guess they're not as popular as bikes are in Europe because, in our country, people tend to use public transport such as buses and subways because we don't have those designated roads for bikes.

The original sentence ends with and, so it is incomplete. A sentence should not finish with a conjunction unless another clause follows. Removing the final and makes the sentence grammatically complete.