自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevabınız soruya doğrudan yanıt veriyor ve bisikletin rengini ve onu nasıl öğrendiğinizi belirtiyor. Ancak geçmişten bahsederken zaman uyumuna dikkat etmelisiniz: “when I’m a child” yerine “when I was a child”, “it is pink” yerine “it was pink” ve “learned bicycle” yerine “learned to ride a bicycle” kullanılmalı. “Uh” gibi dolgu ifadelerini azaltın ve cümleyi daha doğal bağlamak için “because” veya “also” kullanın. En fazla 2-3 akıcı cümleyle kişisel bir ayrıntı eklemeniz cevabı daha etkili yapar.

範例: Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child because pink was my favorite color. I learned to ride it by myself, so I felt really proud and independent.

建議: Ana fikriniz ve nedeniniz anlaşılır; ancak “when they when they go to their go to their job” bölümünde belirgin tekrarlar ve doğal olmayan ifadeler var. “Go to their job” yerine “go to work”, “bike lines” yerine bağlama göre “bike lanes” veya “cycling lanes” kullanmalısınız. İki kez “because” kullanmak yerine önce ana nedeni belirtip ardından ülkenizdeki ulaşım alışkanlıklarını ve bisiklet yollarının eksikliğini açıklayın. Cevabı 3 akıcı cümleye bölerek daha net ve etkili hale getirebilirsiniz.

範例: No, bikes are not very popular in my country. Most people drive to work or meet their friends by car because public transport and cars are more convenient. In addition, many cities have very few cycling lanes, which makes cycling less safe.

× I had a bike when I'm a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about your childhood, so you should use the past tense. The past form of am is was. Keep the verb tense consistent with had.

× It is a pink.

✓ It was pink.

Pink is an adjective, so it cannot be used with the article a by itself. Use it was pink because the sentence refers to the bike in the past.

× I learned bicycle by myself.

✓ I learned to ride a bicycle by myself.

The verb learn needs a clearer structure here. Use learn to ride a bicycle when describing the process of acquiring the ability to ride.

× People use a car when they go to their job or meet their friends.

✓ People use cars when they go to work or meet their friends.

The sentence describes people in general, so the plural noun cars is more appropriate than the singular phrase a car. The expression go to work is also the natural expression for traveling to one's workplace.

× When they when they go to their go to their job or meet their friends.

✓ When they go to work or meet their friends.

The words when they and go to their are repeated, which makes the sentence structurally incorrect. Remove the repetitions and use the concise structure when they go to work or meet their friends.