自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then add one or two specific details. Correct the vocabulary and grammar errors: say “bike,” not “buy”; “around the neighborhood,” not “around the week”; “explored the local park,” not “explore the local pet”; and “felt free and independent,” not “feel very freedom and independent.” Keep the past tense consistent because you are describing your childhood.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike when I was six, and I used to ride it every evening with my brothers and the neighborhood children. We often explored the local park, and I enjoyed cycling because it made me feel free and independent.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason or comparison. Avoid repetition of “because,” remove the article from the plural noun (“cars”), and say “people use cars more often than bikes.” Also, explain why cars are considered more convenient or safer, and avoid fillers such as “umm.”

範例: Not really. In my country, most people use cars or other vehicles rather than bikes because they are more convenient for long distances and are generally considered safer on busy roads. However, cycling is becoming more popular among young people and fitness enthusiasts.

× Yes I did, my parents bought me a bike when I was 6 and I used to ride it every evening with my brothers and the neighborhood kids around the week.

✓ Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike when I was six, and I used to ride it every evening with my brothers and the neighborhood kids throughout the week.

The original sentence joins two complete sentences with only a comma, which creates a comma splice. Separate them with a period or join them with a suitable conjunction. Also, throughout the week is the natural prepositional phrase for meaning during the whole week.

× I used to ride it every evening with my brothers and the neighborhood kids around the week.

✓ I used to ride it every evening with my brothers and the neighborhood kids throughout the week.

Around the week is not the natural expression for this meaning. Use throughout the week or all week to describe an activity that continued during the whole week.

× Riding was a lot of fun because we explore the local park and feel very freedom and independent.

✓ Riding was a lot of fun because we explored the local park and felt very free and independent.

The sentence describes past experiences, so the verbs must be in the past tense. Explore becomes explored, and feel becomes felt. Keep the verb tense consistent with was and used to ride.

× We felt very freedom and independent.

✓ We felt very free and independent.

Freedom is a noun, but this sentence requires adjectives after felt to describe the people. Use free and independent. The adverb very can correctly modify both adjectives.

× In my country people use a cars or vehicles more than a bike.

✓ In my country, people use cars or other vehicles more than bikes.

Cars is plural, so it cannot be used with the singular article a. Remove a before cars. Bikes is used in the plural to make a general comparison with cars and other vehicles.

× They think it's very easy and it's very safe.

✓ They think cars are very easy to use and are very safe.

The pronoun it is singular, but the subject being discussed is cars or other vehicles, which is plural. Use the plural noun cars and the plural verb are. Adding to use also makes easy clearer in meaning.

× Not really, because in my country people use cars or vehicles more than a bike because they think it's very easy and safe.

✓ Not really. In my country, people use cars or other vehicles more than bikes because they think cars are easier to use and safer.

The original sentence repeats because in a confusing way and contains a comma splice after Not really. End the introductory response with a period, then use one clear because clause to give the reason.