自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời có ý trả lời trực tiếp và đưa ra một số chi tiết cá nhân, nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên. “About when I was five years old” nên đổi thành “When I was about five years old”; “with red color” nên dùng “red” hoặc “painted red”; và “I really like it” cần đổi sang quá khứ là “I really liked it”. Chi tiết gặp Donald Trump khá bất ngờ và khó tin, khiến câu trả lời kém tự nhiên; nên thay bằng một sự việc đời thường, chẳng hạn như bị ngã hoặc làm hỏng xe. Ngoài ra, không nên lặp lại “but” quá nhiều; hãy dùng “However” hoặc “Unfortunately” để liên kết ý. Nên giữ câu trả lời trong khoảng 3–4 câu, gồm câu trả lời trực tiếp, mô tả chiếc xe và một kỷ niệm ngắn.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was about five years old, I had a beautiful red bicycle, and I really liked riding it around my neighborhood. Unfortunately, I damaged it after falling off while I was learning to ride. My parents later bought me a new one.

建議: Câu trả lời có sự so sánh giữa quá khứ và hiện tại, đồng thời có ví dụ và lý do, nhưng từ vựng và cấu trúc còn nhiều lỗi. “Places” và “swing sport” không phù hợp với ngữ cảnh; có thể bạn muốn nói “bicycles” và “means of transport”. Câu hỏi hỏi liệu xe đạp có phổ biến hay không, vì vậy cần trả lời rõ ngay từ đầu, chẳng hạn “They are fairly popular, especially among students, but they are less common for commuting.” Không nên nói rằng xe đạp từng là phương tiện phổ biến nhất nếu chưa chắc chắn; hãy phân biệt việc sử dụng xe đạp cho thể thao, đi học và đi làm. “Because of such technological advances and greater affordability” hơi gượng; nên dùng “With the development of technology and the availability of affordable motorbikes”. Lưu ý dùng thì quá khứ và hiện tại chính xác, đồng thời sử dụng từ nối như “However” và “For example” một cách tự nhiên.

範例: Yes, bikes are still fairly popular in Vietnam, especially among children and people who enjoy cycling for exercise. However, motorbikes are more common for daily commuting because they are faster and more convenient in busy cities. For example, many adults use motorbikes to travel to work, while students often ride bicycles to school.

× Yes, about when I was five years old, I used to have a bike but it was a really beautiful one with red color.

✓ Yes, when I was about five years old, I used to have a bike, and it was a really beautiful one with a red color.

The singular countable noun color needs the indefinite article a. However, a more natural expression would be it was red. Also, when I was about five years old is the correct word order for expressing age.

× I really like it, but by coincidence, I met Donald Trump at that time and I let him use my bike, but by his heavy weight, it broke down.

✓ I really liked it, but by coincidence, I met Donald Trump at that time and let him use my bike. Because of his heavy weight, it broke down.

The phrase at that time refers to a past event, so like should be changed to the past-tense form liked. The verb let is irregular, and its past form is also let, so no change is needed there.

× I really like it, but by coincidence, I met Donald Trump at that time and I let him use my bike, but by his heavy weight, it broke down.

✓ I really liked it, but by coincidence, I met Donald Trump at that time and let him use my bike. Because of his heavy weight, it broke down.

The preposition by is not appropriate for showing the cause of the bike breaking. Use because of to introduce the reason or cause.

× In the past, places used to be the most popular form of swing sport in Vietnam, but because of such technological advances and greater affordability, people now tend to use more motorbikes and cars instead.

✓ In the past, bicycles used to be the most popular form of transport in Vietnam, but because of technological advances and greater affordability, people now tend to use more motorbikes and cars instead.

The noun phrase places used to be the most popular form of swing sport is not grammatically or logically well formed. Bicycles is the appropriate subject, and form of transport creates a clear and correct noun phrase. The expression such technological advances is also unnecessary here; technological advances is sufficient.

× For example, motorbikes were faster and more convenient for commuting in the city.

✓ For example, motorbikes are faster and more convenient for commuting in the city.

The question concerns the present situation, and the sentence describes a current general fact. Therefore, use the present-tense verb are instead of the past-tense verb were.