自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question more directly at the beginning by saying whether you had a bike. Reduce fillers such as “uh” and avoid the unnecessary repetition in “my neighbors, they.” Use the past tense consistently: “they tended to ride,” “I made my father buy me,” and “I was jealous of them,” since “bikes” is plural. Keep the answer to two or three clear sentences and add one specific detail about using the bike.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about six or seven years old. All my neighbors used to ride around the neighborhood, so I asked my father to buy me a pink bike too. I was very excited to ride it with them after school.

建議: Your answer is direct and gives a reason, but “kids and children” is repetitive, and “healthy advantage” is not natural English. Say that cycling is a good form of exercise or helps people stay healthy. Add a specific supporting detail, such as where people ride or why adults use bikes, and avoid self-correction by planning the phrase before speaking.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because cycling is an enjoyable form of exercise and helps people stay healthy. Many children ride them in parks, while adults often use bicycles to commute or avoid traffic. In recent years, bike-sharing services have also made cycling more convenient.

× I remember when, uh, I was about six or seven years old, uh, my neighbors, they all had bikes and uh, they tend to, uh, ride it in the neighborhood. And I was so jealous of it that, uh, I made my father bought me a pink bike.

✓ I remember that when I was about six or seven years old, my neighbors all had bikes and tended to ride them around the neighborhood. I was so jealous of their bikes that I made my father buy me a pink bike.

Because the speaker is describing a childhood experience, the past tense is required: tend should be tended. After the causative verb make, use the base form of the verb, so made my father bought is incorrect; made my father buy is correct. The structure is make + object + base verb.

× I remember when, uh, I was about six or seven years old, uh, my neighbors, they all had bikes and uh, they tend to, uh, ride it in the neighborhood. And I was so jealous of it that, uh, I made my father bought me a pink bike.

✓ I remember that when I was about six or seven years old, my neighbors all had bikes and tended to ride them around the neighborhood. I was so jealous of their bikes that I made my father buy me a pink bike.

Bikes is plural, so the object pronoun should be them, not it. Also, it does not clearly refer to the bikes in the next clause. Their bikes clearly shows what the speaker was jealous of. Avoid using a singular pronoun for a plural noun.

× Yes, they are very popular in my country because it is a fun exercise and it helps kids and children to have healthy advantage I mean healthy advantage from riding the bikes.

✓ Yes, they are very popular in my country because riding bikes is a fun form of exercise and helps children gain health benefits.

When talking about bikes in general, do not use the definite article the before bikes. The phrase the bikes refers to particular bikes already identified. Use riding bikes for a general activity. In addition, health benefits is the natural plural expression for the advantages gained from exercise.