自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly, then organize the details in a clear order: when you learned to ride, why your family had bikes, and how many you have now. Correct the grammatical errors: “I learned how to ride a bike at the age of seven,” “My dad was a cyclist, so he loved bikes,” and “we had a few bikes when I was growing up.” Avoid restarting with “I I,” and replace “Just talking a storage room” with “They just take up space in our storage room.”

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned how to ride it at the age of seven because my dad was a keen cyclist. We had several bikes at home while I was growing up, and we probably still have about five of them. They just take up quite a lot of space in our storage room.

建議: Give a direct answer first and support it with one clear reason and a specific example. Use “bikes” rather than “Bucks,” and say “Because heavy traffic is common in my country” instead of “with heavy traffic being rampant.” Improve the unclear phrase “which is hilarious city” to “which is a funny name for a city” or explain why the place is called the bike capital. Avoid repeating your conclusion at the end.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines, mainly because traffic is very heavy in many cities. In fact, the place where I grew up is known as the bike capital of the Philippines, which is a funny name for a city. Many people use bicycles for exercise and short trips because they are convenient and inexpensive.

× I I learned how to ride a bike the age of seven.

✓ I learned how to ride a bike at the age of seven.

The preposition at is required before the age of seven. The repeated subject I is also removed because it is unnecessary.

× My dad was a cycler so he loves bikes and we have few bikes growing up.

✓ My dad was a cyclist, so he loved bikes, and we had a few bikes when I was growing up.

The sentence describes the past, so loves and have should be changed to the past-tense forms loved and had. The phrase when I was growing up correctly indicates the past time period.

× My dad was a cycler so he loves bikes and we have few bikes growing up.

✓ My dad was a cyclist, so he loved bikes, and we had a few bikes when I was growing up.

Use a few to mean a small number of countable plural nouns in a positive or neutral way. Few without a is usually used to emphasize that the number is insufficient or surprisingly small.

× Just talking a storage room.

✓ I am just talking about a storage room.

The original sentence is a fragment because it does not contain a complete subject-verb structure. Adding I am creates a complete sentence. The preposition about is also needed after talking when introducing the topic.

× Just talking a storage room.

✓ I am just talking about a storage room.

The verb phrase talking about is used when referring to the subject being discussed. The preposition about cannot be omitted in this sentence.

× With heavy traffic being rampant in our country, Bucks is definitely popular and the place where I grew up is literally called the bike capital of the Philippines which is hilarious city.

✓ With heavy traffic being rampant in our country, bikes are definitely popular, and the place where I grew up is literally called the bike capital of the Philippines, which is a hilarious name for a city.

The singular countable noun name requires the indefinite article a. The article is placed before hilarious name because the sentence refers to one name. The commas also separate the additional descriptive clause clearly.