自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two clear supporting details. Avoid filler words (e.g., “well”, “umm”) and unnecessary repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “but” or “however”) and mention a specific memory or reason to make your answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I had a blue bicycle when I was a child. It was my only bike and I loved it because it was bright blue and had a comfortable seat, so I rode it every afternoon to visit friends. However, I don't own a bike now because I moved to a city where I usually use public transport.

建議: Start with a direct statement, then add two coherent supporting details using linking words (for example, “because” and “for example”). Be specific about who uses bikes (students, commuters) or where (cities, rural areas), and give one concrete example such as a festival or a competition name to strengthen your answer.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, students and office workers often cycle to school or work, and every year there is a national cycling race that attracts thousands of participants and spectators.

× Well, I used to have one bicycle in a blue color, which is my favorite.

✓ Well, I used to have a blue bicycle, which was my favorite.

The phrase 'in a blue color' is awkward and unidiomatic; use 'a blue bicycle'. Also 'which is my favorite' should match past context 'used to' so change to 'which was my favorite'. This corrects misuse of participle phrase and improves tense consistency. Suggestion: Use natural noun phrases ('a blue bicycle') and keep tense consistent with 'used to' by using past reference words like 'was'.

× that was my only bicycle in my childhood, but recently I don't have one.

✓ That was my only bicycle during my childhood, but recently I don't have one.

Use 'during my childhood' instead of 'in my childhood' for more natural preposition use. Capitalize sentence start if needed. The rest is fine; no article change required for 'one'. Suggestion: Prefer 'during' with periods of time and keep pronoun references clear.

× Yes, they are really popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bicycles are really popular in my country.

The pronoun 'they' is grammatically correct but vague; explicitly naming 'bicycles' improves clarity. No grammatical error required by list, but clarity improvement suggested. Suggestion: Use the noun when starting a new response to avoid ambiguous pronouns.

× There are lots of bikes and the people using them and there are some competitions in my country about cycling.

✓ There are many bikes and many people use them, and there are also cycling competitions in my country.

Original sentence is a run-on with missing verbs and awkward phrasing ('the people using them' lacks a main verb). Break into coordinated clauses: 'many bikes and many people use them' and add 'also' for cohesion. Replace 'lots of' with 'many' for formal tone and move 'cycling' to modify 'competitions'. Suggestion: Ensure each clause has a subject and finite verb; avoid run-on structures by using conjunctions and parallel forms.