自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, tense accuracy and provide a bit more detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I used it to ride to school and visit my friends, and I rode it almost every day during the summer. Because my neighborhood was quiet, cycling felt safe and fun.

建議: Work on sentence structure, cohesion and clarity. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons and use linking words (for example, 'because', 'however', 'for example'). Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use appropriate vocabulary (e.g. 'own a car', 'older people').

範例: Yes, bikes are still fairly popular in my country. For example, not everyone can afford a car, so many people use bicycles for short trips and commuting. However, they are more common among older people and in smaller cities where traffic is lighter.

× 'I have one bike when I'm a child.'

✓ 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

'have' and 'am' are present tense forms but the examiner's question asks about the past. Use past simple 'had' for possession in the past and 'was' for the past state. Suggestion: use past simple consistently for past-time statements.'

× 'Bike in my country is popular because in my country is not the common situation that everyone has its own car.'

✓ 'Bikes are popular in my country because it is not common for everyone to have their own car.'

'Bike' (singular) should be plural 'Bikes' when speaking generally. The clause 'in my country is not the common situation that everyone has its own car' is ungrammatical and awkward; use 'it is not common for everyone to have their own car.' This fixes subject-verb agreement and sentence structure. Suggestion: use plural for general statements and a clearnexpletive 'it' + adjective + infinitive structure.'

× 'I admit that most people in China have their own car, their own vehicles.'

✓ 'I admit that most people in China have their own cars or other vehicles.'

'their own car' is singular after 'most people' (plural); use plural 'cars'. Also 'their own vehicles' is redundant; combine into 'cars or other vehicles.' Suggestion: ensure pronouns match plural nouns and avoid redundancy.'

× 'However, some people, some other people, especially the elderly, do not have the vehicle.'

✓ 'However, some people, especially the elderly, do not have vehicles.'

'do not have the vehicle' is incorrect because 'the vehicle' implies a specific vehicle; use plural 'vehicles' when speaking generally. Also the present tense 'do not have' is fine for general truth, but simplify repetition 'some people, some other people' to 'some people.' Suggestion: remove redundancy and use plural nouns for general statements.'