自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be consistent and concise. Your answer contradicts itself (saying you didn’t have a bike, then saying you had a bicycle). Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the contradiction, and add one or two brief supporting details using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t own a bike when I was very young, but later I had a bicycle that I rode with my friends. For example, we would cycle to a nearby park every weekend, which helped me make friends and get exercise.

建議: Finish your thought and be more specific. Provide a complete topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example using a linking word (e.g., "for example" or "because"). Avoid vague phrases and incomplete sentences. Keep responses natural and concise.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people enjoy cycling for sport and leisure. For example, there are popular mountain routes where riders train on weekends, and cycling clubs often organize group rides.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, I had a bicycle on which I used to ride with my friends.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child; I had a bicycle that I used to ride with my friends.

The original sentence is grammatically understandable but contains redundancy and punctuation issues. 'Bike' and 'bicycle' are synonymous, so using both in the same sentence is repetitive. Also the clause 'on which I used to ride with my friends' is awkward; using a relative clause with 'that' and the active structure 'I used to ride with my friends' is clearer. Replace the comma with a semicolon or make two sentences to join two independent clauses correctly. Suggestion: Avoid repeating synonymous words and use appropriate punctuation to join independent clauses.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because there are many riders who ride the bike round the mountains and they love

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many riders ride their bikes around the mountains and they enjoy it.

The original sentence has several issues: 'ride the bike' is unnatural because 'the' is specific; 'their bikes' or just 'ride bikes' is better (article error / pronoun issue). 'Round' is acceptable in informal British English but 'around' is more general. The sentence also ends incomplete with 'and they love' — it needs an object (what they love). I completed it with 'and they enjoy it.' Suggestion: Use consistent pronouns/plural forms (riders ... their bikes), avoid leaving clauses unfinished, and use complete verb phrases.