自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and natural but a bit short and repetitive. To improve, start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., where you rode, a memorable experience, or how it affected you) using a linking phrase. Avoid filler phrases like “yeah” at the start and end, and keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences for conciseness.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was about seven from my father, and I often rode it around the neighbourhood park after school. Because of that bike I became more independent and used to meet friends for short rides on weekends.

建議: The main idea is understandable but the response is unclear and has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Improve by stating a clear topic sentence about popularity, then explain with one specific reason and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, for instance) and correct vocabulary (e.g., “bike-sharing scheme” instead of “UBI” or “easy cart”). Keep sentences concise and coherent.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because of widespread bike-sharing schemes. For instance, there are many dockless bikes parked on the street that people can unlock with an app, so cycling is an easy and affordable way to travel short distances.

× I was about seven or eight in primary school.

✓ I was about seven or eight years old in primary school.

The original sentence omits the word 'years' after the age expression. When giving ages in English, use 'years old' after the number (or simply the number + 'years old') to be natural and grammatically correct.

× My dad bought me a bike so that I could have fun riding.

✓ My dad bought me a bike so that I could have fun riding it.

The verb phrase 'have fun riding' is acceptable but sounds incomplete without the object 'it' referring to the bike. Adding the object clarifies what was ridden.

× I would say so there is a regime pushed by government called UBI where if you find a couple lined up on the street and if they're free and available you could use easy cart, it's tap on a go very easy to get access to.

✓ I would say so. There is a scheme promoted by the government called UBI: if you find a couple of bikes lined up on the street and they are free and available, you can use an e-bike by tapping and going; it is very easy to access.

This long original sentence has multiple issues: run-on structure, incorrect word choices, and missing articles/prepositions. Corrections: split into two sentences for clarity; use 'scheme promoted by the government' for natural wording; 'couple of bikes' instead of 'a couple lined up'; remove redundant 'if'; use 'they are' not contraction in formal correction; replace 'could' with 'can' to express general ability/present fact; 'easy cart' is unclear — replaced with 'e-bike' as likely intended; 'it's tap on a go' corrected to 'by tapping and going' and 'very easy to access' made grammatical.

× So I would say generally popular.

✓ So I would say they are generally popular.

The original sentence is a fragment missing a subject and verb. To complete it, include the subject 'they' (referring to bikes) and the verb 'are' to form a full present-tense statement: 'they are generally popular.'