自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep answer to fewer than five sentences and correct small grammar errors (e.g., "when I was a child", "a bicycle").

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I grew up in a rural area, so most children owned bikes and we used them to travel to school and visit friends. This made cycling a normal part of daily life for me.

建議: Begin with a direct opinion, avoid filler phrases and repetition, and use linking words to explain reasons clearly. Correct grammar (e.g., "I don't see people riding bikes", "it can be dangerous"). Add one specific example or consequence for clarity.

範例: Not really. I rarely see people riding bikes in Thailand because there are few dedicated bike lanes, so cycling on busy roads can be dangerous. For example, many cyclists choose motorbikes or cars for daily commuting to avoid traffic risks.

× I did have a bike when I was child because I I I think mostly because I grew up in a rural area so having bicycle was very common at that time.

✓ I did have a bike when I was a child because, I think, mostly because I grew up in a rural area so having a bicycle was very common at that time.

Errors: missing article before 'child' and before 'bicycle'; repeated filler words 'I I I' and punctuation issues. Reason: English requires the indefinite article 'a' with singular countable nouns ('a child', 'a bicycle'). Also remove repeated fillers and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'a child' and 'a bicycle', avoid repeated filler words, and punctuate pauses with commas.

× Nowadays I don't see people ride a bike anymore because well, I think, I think the main reason is that in Thailand we rarely have a bike lane.

✓ Nowadays I don't see people riding bikes anymore because, well, I think the main reason is that in Thailand we rarely have bike lanes.

Errors: wrong verb form after 'see' (should be gerund 'riding') and singular/plural consistency with 'bike lanes'. Reason: After verbs of perception like 'see', use the -ing form for ongoing actions ('see people riding'). Also use plural 'bike lanes' when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use 'riding' after 'see' and match count (plural) for general statements.

× So it's kind of be dangerous when you ride a bike on the road.

✓ So it's kind of dangerous when you ride a bike on the road.

Error: extra 'be' after 'kind of' creates ungrammatical structure. Reason: The contraction 'it's' (it is) already provides the verb 'be', so adding another 'be' is redundant. Suggestion: Remove the extra 'be' and say 'it's kind of dangerous'.