自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để trả lời rõ ràng, ngắn gọn (tối đa 5 câu). Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No + thông tin ngắn), sau đó cho 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ: ai tặng, dịp nào, cảm xúc, kỷ niệm rõ ràng). Dùng liên từ hợp lý (for example, because, and, although) để mạch lạc. Tránh từ thừa và lỗi từ vựng như “in my child” → “when I was a child”, “have to buy it from the gift” → “received it as a gift”.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me for my seventh birthday, and it was a simple red bike rather than a fancy one. I remember the first day I learned to ride it; my father held the seat while I practised for an hour. That bike made me feel very proud because it was my first real independence.

建議: Trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và nêu lý do cụ thể. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (“Yes, I think.../No, I don’t think...”); tiếp theo nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể với từ nối (for example, because, however). Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: “exercise” thay vì “doing to keep the healthy”, “older people” → “elderly people”), và sửa cấu trúc như “many people in Dubai ride bikes for exercise, not for commuting.” Giữ tối đa 5 câu, tránh lặp từ như “everyone”.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Dubai. Many people use bicycles for exercise and leisure rather than commuting to work. For example, families and elderly people often ride along waterfronts or parks on weekends. However, cycling is less common for daily travel because of the hot weather and long distances.

× In my child I have to buy it from the gift from my parent in my birthday and despite it not very fantastic, it's not very fancy or beautiful, but it's the most to think about that you're the first day I'm learning how to ride a bike and so it all that.

✓ When I was a child, my parents gave me a bike as a birthday present. It was not very fancy or beautiful, but I always remember the first day I learned how to ride it.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: incorrect tense and time expression ('In my child' should be 'When I was a child'), wrong verb phrase ('I have to buy it from the gift from my parent' should be a past passive/give construction), run-on and unclear clauses ('despite it not very fantastic' and 'it's the most to think about that you're the first day I'm learning' are ungrammatical). To improve, break the long run-on into clear sentences, use correct past simple for past events, use correct verb forms (gave/gifted), and use clear connectors (but, always remember). Practice writing one main idea per sentence and check subject-verb relationships. Second sentence correction notes: use past simple 'was' to describe the bike, use 'remember the first day I learned' rather than present progressive mixed with unclear pronouns.

× Guess my country Dubai is very popular, everyone going by bikes but not for the work, it's for the exercise from doing to keep the healthy and it's special for the older people or some children they all have the time to playing outside.

✓ In my country, Dubai, cycling is popular. Many people ride bikes for exercise rather than for commuting. It is especially common among older people and some children who have time to play outside.

This sentence contains multiple structure and word-choice errors. 'Guess my country Dubai is very popular' is an awkward opener; use 'In my country, Dubai,' and a clear subject. 'Everyone going by bikes' lacks a verb form; use 'Many people ride bikes.' 'Not for the work' should be 'not for commuting' or 'not for work.' 'It's for the exercise from doing to keep the healthy' is ungrammatical; use 'for exercise' and 'to stay healthy.' 'It's special for the older people or some children they all have the time to playing outside' is a run-on with incorrect verb form 'playing'; use 'It is especially common among older people and some children who have time to play outside.' To improve, separate ideas into sentences, use correct verb forms, and choose precise vocabulary (commuting, exercise, stay healthy).