自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and use correct tense and clearer structure. Start with a short topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child”), then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct past tense, avoid repeating filler phrases like “it's like,” and keep it within 2–4 sentences. Also choose precise vocabulary (e.g., “couldn’t afford” instead of “can't afford”).

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn’t afford one because they prioritized food and other necessities, so buying a bike wasn’t possible. As a result, I usually walked to school or used public transport.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence then support it with a reason and a short example. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”) and correct grammar (plural forms, simpler clauses). Keep it concise and avoid hesitation. Be specific about who uses bikes and why.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many families buy bikes for young children and adults use them for short trips. For example, parents often buy small bikes for five- or seven-year-olds so they can ride to parks or school nearby.

× Well, I don't have a bike when I was a child because I felt it's like my parents can't afford it.

✓ Well, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I felt my parents couldn't afford it.

Tense inconsistency: 'don't have' is present tense but context 'when I was a child' requires past tense. Use 'didn't have'. Also 'can't' should be past 'couldn't' to match time frame. Remove unnecessary filler 'it's like' or rephrase; here keep meaning by using 'I felt my parents couldn't afford it'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for actions and feelings in the past; check auxiliary verbs (do/did, can/could).

× So bike is not that really important so I don't have it.

✓ So a bike was not really important, so I didn't have one.

Article and tense errors: English requires an article before singular countable nouns ('a bike'). Also maintain past tense ('was', 'didn't have') to match earlier past-time context. Use 'one' to avoid repeating the noun. Suggestion: Use 'a' or 'the' with singular countable nouns and keep verb tenses consistent.

× Yes, I do because even a kid that is seven years old, five years old let their parents ride one or the parents buy one for their child I think that's popular

✓ Yes, I do, because even a child of five or seven may have their parents buy a bike for them; I think that's popular.

Run-on sentence and unclear structure: original lacks proper punctuation and has mixed clauses. 'A kid that is seven years old, five years old' is awkward; better 'a child of five or seven'. 'Let their parents ride one' is ungrammatical and confusing—likely meant 'their parents buy one' or 'their parents let them ride one'. Also use singular 'a child' and gender-neutral 'their' is acceptable but keep verbs clear. Maintain present tense for general statements ('I think that's popular'). Suggestion: Break into clauses with commas or semicolons, choose clear subject-verb pairs, and keep tense appropriate for general truths.