自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Structure your reply with a clear topic sentence, avoid run-on phrases, and add one or two specific details linked logically. Use a linking word to show cause or consequence (for example, 'so' or 'which'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was twelve, and it came with training wheels which made me feel safe. Because of those training wheels, I learned to balance and ride confidently within a few weeks.

建議: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because' and 'for example'). Avoid repetition and correct small grammar issues (subject-verb agreement, tense). Keep responses concise and use relevant vocabulary like 'popular', 'trend', 'children', 'technology'.

範例: No, I don't think bikes are as popular now as they used to be. This is because children and adults spend more time on electronic devices, so they have less free time for outdoor activities. For example, parks that were once full of children on bikes are now often quieter in the afternoons.

× Yes, I did back when I was twelve years old, I had a bike with training wheels and it helped me a lot with learning how to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was twelve years old, I had a bike with training wheels, and it helped me a lot to learn how to ride.

The original sentence is a run-on with tense and phrasing issues. Split into two sentences for clarity and maintain past tense consistently. Use 'When I was twelve years old' instead of 'back when' for formality, and 'helped me a lot to learn' is a clearer construction than 'helped me a lot with learning'. Also add a period after 'Yes, I did' to avoid a comma splice.

× I believe not they are not as popular now as compared back then because back then they usually have have free time to do so, especially with the kids.

✓ I don't think they are as popular now as they were back then because children used to have more free time to ride them.

The original has subject-verb order problem ('I believe not they are...' is incorrect) and tense/agreement issues ('have have', 'especially with the kids'). Use 'I don't think' for negative belief. Compare present to past with 'as they were back then'. Replace 'they usually have have free time' with 'children used to have more free time' to fix repetition and tense. Remove 'especially with the kids' and integrate 'children' to be more natural.

× But now since the people are used to electronics, I don't think so.

✓ But now, since people are used to electronics, I don't think so.

The phrase 'the people' is unnatural; use 'people'. The verb 'are used to' is present tense and fine, but remove the comma splice by connecting clauses properly. The sentence is otherwise acceptable after small article adjustment.