自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and correct grammar, give a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense errors and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a direct statement in the past, then add where, what you did, and a brief comment about learning to ride. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was about 12 years old in Saudi Arabia. I often rode it around local parks with my friends, although I never had formal lessons and learned mostly by practicing on my own.

建議: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Mention evidence or examples if possible (e.g., more screen time, fewer outdoor spaces). Avoid vague phrases like "I would say" and keep sentences concise.

範例: They used to be quite popular when I was a child because many kids enjoyed learning to ride, but now fewer children ride bikes as more people prefer electronic devices and indoor activities. For instance, many families spend evenings on smartphones or gaming rather than going outside.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes I did.

The examiner asked about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). The response 'Yes I do' uses present tense, which is incorrect for a past situation. Use past tense 'did' to match the time reference. Suggestion: Pay attention to time markers like 'when you were a child' and use past tense verbs accordingly.

× I had a bike when I was around 12 years old and it was back in Saudi when I lived there.

✓ I had a bike when I was around 12 years old back in Saudi, where I lived.

The original sentence is understandable but wordy and slightly awkward in pronoun/place reference. Combining clauses and using 'where I lived' clearly links 'Saudi' to living there. Also remove redundant 'it was'. Suggestion: Use relative clauses (where) to connect place and action for clarity.

× I used to bike around the parks and I don't really specifically knew how to ride one.

✓ I used to bike around the parks and I didn't really know specifically how to ride one.

Mixing tenses and verb forms: 'don't' is present while 'knew' is past; also after 'didn't' the base form 'know' must be used (not 'knew'). The correct past negative is 'didn't know'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (past) and use base verb after 'did'/'didn't'.

× I wasn't really trained but.

✓ I wasn't really trained, though.

The original fragment ends with 'but' leaving the sentence incomplete. Replacing 'but' with 'though' completes the thought and fits spoken informal style. Alternatively, finish the clause (e.g., 'but I learned by myself'). Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; either complete the clause after 'but' or use a concluding adverb like 'though'.

× I would say back then when I was little it was popular as a lot of kids would like to learn how to ride a bike, but now I personally think that people are drawn towards electronics.

✓ I would say that back then, when I was little, bikes were popular because a lot of kids wanted to learn how to ride, but now I personally think people are drawn to electronics.

Tense and phrasing issues: 'it was popular' is vague; 'bikes were popular' is clearer. 'Would like to learn' mixes conditional/habitual with past context; use simple past 'wanted' for past habitual desire. 'Drawn towards' is acceptable but 'drawn to' is more natural. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past periods, choose precise subject ('bikes'), and prefer 'drawn to' for attraction.