自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I did.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tenses and linking words. Use past tense for childhood events, avoid repetition, and keep answers to under five sentences. For example mention who encouraged you, how you rode, and why it was important using linking words such as “because” or “so”.

範例: Yes, I did. My father encouraged me to ride a bike when I was about six, and I practiced regularly with him in the park. Because I enjoyed it so much, cycling became my favourite childhood activity and helped me stay active and confident.

建議: Give a direct opinion followed by specific reasons and examples. Use clearer phrasing and linking words like “because” and “for example.” Avoid vague phrases such as “modern activities” without explanation. Mention evidence (e.g. bike lanes, bike-sharing schemes) and keep sentences concise. Use present tense for general facts.

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many cities have built bike lanes and bike-sharing programs. For example, in my city people often cycle to work or university, and the government promotes cycling as a healthy and eco-friendly mode of transport.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about past possession ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the response should use past tense. 'Have' is present tense and incorrect here; use 'did' as the past auxiliary for short answers. Also 'Yes, I did' implies 'I had a bike.' Suggestion: use past-tense short answers that match the question's tense.

× It's because my favorite activities.

✓ It was one of my favorite activities.

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical. 'It's because my favorite activities' lacks a clear subject and verb agreement and mismatches tense. The student refers to the past, so use past tense 'was'. Also use 'one of my favorite activities' to make the sentence complete and meaningful. Suggestion: make sure sentences have subject, verb, and object and match the time frame.

× So my dad encouraged me to sports like bike and I just training with fun and it's so important for me because it made me my childhood and also my favorite activities.

✓ So my dad encouraged me to play sports like cycling, and I just trained for fun. It was very important to me because it shaped my childhood and became one of my favorite activities.

Multiple issues: 'encouraged me to sports' uses incorrect preposition and verb form—use 'play sports' or 'do sports' and 'cycling' instead of 'bike'. 'I just training' is missing auxiliary and wrong tense; use past tense 'I just trained' or 'I trained for fun.' 'It's so important for me because it made me my childhood' is unclear and tense-mismatched; use past tense 'It was very important to me because it shaped my childhood.' Also 'became one of my favorite activities' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use correct verb forms after 'encourage', use gerunds/infinitives appropriately, and keep consistent past tense.

× I think yes, because we have modern society and we should use more modern activities and by its best option for this and my country encourage our citizens to train bikes.

✓ I think so, because we have a modern society and we should do more modern activities. Cycling is a good option for this, and my country encourages citizens to cycle.

Several tense and word-choice errors: reply to 'Do you think bikes are popular' should use present tense 'I think so' not 'I think yes.' 'We have modern society' needs an article: 'a modern society.' 'Use more modern activities' is awkward; 'do more modern activities' fits better. 'By its best option for this' is ungrammatical—replace with 'Cycling is a good option for this.' 'My country encourage' has subject-verb agreement error; correct to 'encourages.' Also 'train bikes' is wrong; use 'cycle' or 'ride bikes.' Suggestion: simplify sentences, use correct articles and subject-verb agreement, and choose appropriate verbs for activities.